GOOD VERSUS EVIL
From the clarity of the best
red wine
To the exceptional food on which
they dine
He in his black suit and crisp
white shirt
She in a low top and split to the
thigh skirt
They sit opposite each other
eyes locked
Under the table in her hand a
gun cocked
Have another drink my darling
he said
In her head she had to shoot
him dead
Her hand was wet dripping
with perspiration
She knew she had to send him
into damnation
He was the devil incarnate in a
believable disguise
But his traits tell, by the tinges of red
in his eyes
He had stolen her soul and she wanted
it back
She wanted to live a good life get back
on track
She was hesitating but bang! she pulled
the trigger
Blood oozed to the floor it pooled
and got bigger
Her job was done she had killed
the devil
The scales were now balanced straight
and level
She stood up looked at him and
walked away
Good versus evil but good won over.To fight
another day...
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Hello Debs. I rather enjoyed your tale of good vs evil and you structured the rhyme and verses very well throughout. How did that devil not see it coming lol. Im left wondering why he had her soul did she get it back when she killed him who is she to be living without a soul, sorry so many questions. Peace to you.
Hi Devon I did`nt know where i was going with this write
at the beginning lol but then thought of the good verses evil scenario
I sort of went on the age old concept of the devil steeling
good souls and the only way she could get her soul back was to kill him
and so her soul was returned on his death,so no living soulless for her after
and he did`nt see it coming because she was clever and lulled him into a false sense
of security by what she wore and the ambiance of the meal :-)
loving the questions my friend
so no sorry`s necessary, best wishes Debs
wow, deborah, a sexy little tale you tell, very dramatic with lots of implications....a Jason Stotham kind of plot; in reverse, lol...anyway, I like it, you don't pull punches, it's a cool creative read, cheers pal, have great day
Hi Christopher Ha ha i like your first words yes she was looking
sexy drawing him in before she shot him glad you saw that :-)
glad you enjoyed thank you for your kind words. Always a
pleasure to read my friend, you have a great day too Debs
Hi Cherie as i said to Devon i did`nt know where i was going go
after the first few lines but then had the idea for this. Only
just make believe but i am sure i have watched a film with this sort of scenario
and i had kept it in mind can`t think what film though
Thank you for your comments always appreciated love n hugs Debs xox
Hi Dear Debs,
It's so crazy. I just finished reading and commenting on Cherie's poem "The Sin In Oblivion". You have to stop now and read my comment on it before reading my comment on yours so you can understand what I mean. Okay, if you're back now, I'll comment on yours, with a poem of my own, which you inspired and I'm going to dedicate to you.
Hugs, Peace and Love,
xox Larry
Hi Larry How did that happen ehh! it was as if you were
commenting my write lol are you psychic Larry?
Thank you for your comments and the dedication once again
Love n hugs Debs xox
Hey DEBS!!.......you have DEFINITELY got a knack for the narrative write.......the simplicity ~ good versus evil ~ is VERY compelling.........because you're forced to take sides.......and THAT makes for the foundation of MANY a fine tale.........LOVED IT!!.......had my head in it ALL the way through.......you're such a clever story teller.........kinda reminded me of that scene with Sharon Stone & Gene Hackman at the dinner table in a western town ~ with her derringer pistol aimed at him under the table.......anyway, I'm rambling........thanx for the coolness.......ALL STARS.....your friend and admirer!!.......T xo
Hi Tony I kind of like these narratives
i find them fun to write my imagination
just runs wild lol
Thank you for your great comments
always appreciated my friend love n hugs Debs xo