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HAIKU

HAIKU

I cannot help you 

I can't even help myself

So please save yourself 

© 2016 Valerie Lynn

Haiku (5-7-5)

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AUTHOR WILLIAMS...

Hi Valerie Lynn,

Good Haiku, my applause, my vote

Regards & Love

Willy

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Valerie Lynn

Thank you Williamsji!! Much Love!!

Val ❤️

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Twisted Angel

strictly speaking a Senryu not Haiku..but this is really really good..even comes with a juxtaposition...I struggle with those
, very nice :)

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Valerie Lynn

Twisted Angel can you please explain?

The haikus I learned in school were poems made up of syllables in the pattern of (5-7-5) with 3 separate lines so I'm not sure what you are implying. 

Thank you :)

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Lucas Lazar

When we try to help and we found a dead weight that pulls us into its fall it should drop their hands and try to save yourself.

A perfect haiku, with four words the express.

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Valerie Lynn

Thank you Lucas! I truly appreciate your comment!!

Val ❤️

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Valerie Lynn

Twisted Angel can you please explain?

The haikus I learned in school were poems made up of syllables in the pattern of (5-7-5) with 3 separate lines so I'm not sure what you are implying. 

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Twisted Angel

Oh cool np, is just that Haiku is nature and Senryu is people...and that's it...oh and their usually untitled, there's loads of other ins and outs about them but that's the basics :)

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Valerie Lynn

Thanks for the help! I need to go back to school :(  haha

Val ❤️

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Devon La Porte

Hello Val, don't know if you took my advice but this is a good Haiku, I see your voice loud in this. Hope those creative juices are flowing now, for me sometimes its just time that does the trick. Much love and respect.

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Valerie Lynn

Thank you Devon!! Yes I did! I'm going to try some more. I really liked how my last poem began but I didn't think anyone would understand what it's about...I guess that's the fun of it...people have their own views on anything someone else writes. We will get to work soon! When I do sleep...the next day it takes me forever to wake up. :)

Val ❤️

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