Poem -
Horizontal Curves & Vertical Bars
looks & reads so much better centered .................
Horizontal Curves & Vertical Bars
She was just so damn good
to look at
But even more fascinating to watch
and observe
Yes, the sight and the sound of her
moving like that
Held fast within those vertical bars
Each one of them
individually amazing and somehow
crazily aligned
Not to mention her spectacular and
elsewise offset
Amorphous and horizontal curves ..
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Comments
Wow...you really do transport your reader into a moment frozen in time...I instantly saw a lady in a stripy dress being observed by a gent sitting idly somewhere... though as with a lot of your writes you could play with the meaning here...you could in my opinion be writing about a favourite poet here also...but there you go...there is my off kilter head for you 🙃...either way a fascinating write Neville x
I like what you see .. that'll do very nicely, thank you Marion ... x
I can only echo Marion here. You truly do submerge your reader into a split moment. For me it felt like someone reading another persons words and being intoxicated by them. As always stunning imagery you clever clever writer
Gwen x
Go on, make my head swell why dont'cha .. thank you so bloomin much Gwen ......................................................................................... x
Always deserving my friend x