Poem - 27 January 2020, 02:43

I WOULD IF I COULD

Given every ounce of energy and even blood
Can't do more but I would if I could
Would cross a river in a monsoon or flood
Can't do that but I would if I could

I have tried to be patient and good
Can't do more but I would if I could
Tried to be superstitious by touching wood
Can't do that but I would if I could

I don't want you to think I'm misunderstood
Can't do more but I would if I could
Give me a chance I think you should
You can't do that but I would if I could

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Poetry Genre:

Drama Narrative Nonsense

Topic:

Positivity

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Andrew Robertson27 January 2020, 11:57

After my first read. Spotted one possible mistake in last verse. Was it meant to read, I don't want you? But loved it non the less.

Audrey youde27 January 2020, 16:44

If your lines were put there Andrew im sorry to say it would not
work as yours do not rhyme,
Kieran to me is my Master and he knows what he means ,
Im sorry

Andrew Robertson27 January 2020, 23:09

It's OK. Was just an observation and an honest critique. Loved the work.