Poem -
Lest Begotten Love
Love existed although twisted.
As rage comes uncaged.
Dreams shattered as a child is battered.
A tiny body abused and bruised.
Blood splattered as teeth scattered.
A mother’s pain under a drunkards reign.
The past haunts as memories taunts.
A life forsaken long before it was brutally taken...
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Comments
Cries out the hidden truths of many many relationships Patrick...sad write 🤗
Thank you for the read and review. It is sadly true i a lot of relationships.Â
much loveÂ
p@t
Thank you for shining a light on the scourge of abuse! nice write! the drawing is really nice as well!
Thank you for the read and review Jim and those starsÂ
much loveÂ
p@t
I really like this clever one verse rhyme that you included so awesome. Best wishes to you Pat! TFOTSÂ
Thank you very much Fish...
p@t
Hey PATRICK,
I am curious as to why you haven't received much more glowing reviews on this piece......you did the drawing correct?.......Which adds greatly to this succinct and powerful piece of poetic prose......and creative piece of cleverly constructed verse........I do think that the body of this could leave a MORE profound impression were it formatted a little differently , by breaking the lines more proactively, but that, of course, is the author's call....and that is only an observation, NOT a criticism!!...Regardless, another in a string of VERY fine poetic offerings!!......ALL STARS!!.....well done dear poet brother!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo : )
Tony
Thank you for this POWERFUL  observation of a 2 minute pen to compliment my sketch...Â
my thought process was to keep both as simple as possible...
Criticism is needed in this chosen profession, more so than any other.
Speechless one again on the great reviews I’m getting on my poetic penmanship(having had no schooling in either arts of this post)...
much respect and loveÂ
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I took your advice and changed the formatting of this pen a bit. I think it does look much more appealing now but I see issues with the title so I may change that as well
thank you very much Tony for the insightful “Hints” of the cosmos...
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