Poem -
Life Force
Softly whisper in my ear,
Touch my simple wet tear.
Listen to my crying pain!
Feel my heart going lame!
See the light; that flickers off,
Reach for heaven's; Spirit soft!
Inhale all fair beauty lost,
Remove treasured family; cost!
Taste the bitter and the sweet,
Rolled in rice paper; so neat.
Hear distant terse ship bell toll,
Even it doth vibrate; cold!
Direct my dark wayward course!
Coalesce my begging; life force!
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thank you Hj my wonderful friend! your last write is a fav of mine and like you, many of my friends have written some great ones lately!
I'll be sure to get on that!
wonderful poem
thank you Greg; my brother!
Hello Jim,
this is a beautiful read. The journey of life and its emotional trials. I loved the structure. Those chosen words that almost whisper in my left ear as I read. Very clever and really brings this piece to another level. How it shines at the end with its last line! To feel complete within the true light and energy of life itself
Stunning ⭐️
Gwen :)
honored Gwen by your kind words! and I'm so glad you heard the whisper!
Superb write Jim
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thank you Marion!
Liliana my friend! thank you!
Awww Jim, what a lovely read. I think the picture really bloody helped with this one. I especially enjoyed the structure, seemed like it was the soft rocking of a ship in calm waters. Love it!!
thank you bunches Max!
thank you Hj!
Jim one to most certainly keep and treasure, such a captivating flow to it and your choice of words for the ending is spectacular to read.
A real journey of a poem and said journey is a good and sublime one.
Richly conceived and impressed and greatly struck in how you have written it, for not a word is wasted or out of place.
A perfect poem you have brilliantly expressed and kindly shared here.
Full deserving honours and poetry kudos respectfully bestowed to your good self.
A sublime and equally superb write.
wow! Shaun, you give me more credit than maybe I deserve! but hey, I'll enjoy your words many times! thank you my friend!