No Looking Back Again

Looking back like that
over her
shoulder, the way
that she
always did, with those
far away
eyes of hers, like flashing
blue lights
tho’ somehow demurely
at our
old here and there’s ..
Yes there,
where we once shared
discreet,
all too brief moments
with my
breath on those lips
of hers
cold, dark and lingering
like some
tasteful, eternal eclipse ..
Back then,
I clearly remember, I had
no expectations
and never felt that way before ..

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Hello Sir NEVILLE!!.....I can totally relate to these type of recollections......but what makes this piece (for me) stand out....is the way you have formatted it.....you have a keen sense of when to break your lines......and that lends more power to the phrasing.....and certainly helps the reader with tempo and timing ~
~ "cold, dark, and lingering
like some
tasteful, eternal eclipse...."
Some seriously high quality phrasing......and VERY memorable imagery!!......ALL STARS!!.....well penned my friend!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.....T xo : )
To coin another phrase .. "Thank You" ................... Neville :)
Totally pinned! Brilliant x
thank you ever so bloomin much for pin-dulging me this afternoon I am absolutely made up & star struck ...................... x
You are soooo welcome x