~ ORANGE ~
Orange,
The world cremates
Evening's play
For life's
Seasons...
The weakening eye of day
For tomorrow will die
In sunset's crypt
The cloudy canopy of hazy
Complexion
With every spirit upon the earth
Slowly recognizing
The inevitable
Crash
Of yellow's decay into
Orange,
Where ripened rinds
Fulfill
Life's acquiescence
And the twisted sundress
That goddesses
Drape
Across suntanned shoulders
So easily wearing
Every virtue
Glowing red
Not unlike seeds sprouting apples
Whose orchard
In its rows of planned sustenance
Ultimately provides
The diapason
Of perfect rainbows
With melodious colors
Melting
Into the harmonious
Sound
Of sunset's voice
And where the heart of it
Bleeds,
Orange.....
Tony Taylor
* I'm determined to get this right
At this point ~ It's still a work in progress
Just looking for new impressions.....
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Comments
Hey T...I don't think you need to change this any more! I think it is gorgeous in its intense imagery and perfection of wording as it is! My goodness it is original in how you make the orange come alive through the precision of adjectives and metaphors! I should try to do a poem about purple, but I do not think I could make it near this impactful and beautiful! So poetically flowing and vibrant! I love this. I would not change a thing. xo Love n Hugs C
Lovely freestyle n thats summit I cannot do :) xx
Thank you JILL.......I really prefer freestyle writes.....it's much easier for me to write within the rules of the various rhyme schemes.....I think it's because I write songs and I've had soooo much practice at it!!....... not to take anything away from the classical form because most of my favorite poets don't do freestyle at all!!......thanx again for all your support!!...... smiles......T xo. : )
Thanx for the stars and the vote MARION!!..... smiles....T xo. : )
Thanx so much for the Vote and the Stars JOHN!!.... stay groovy brother!!..... peace n stuff!!......T xo. : )