Poem -
Phoenix
*Jill's Slowdown please Challenge*
Slowdown time skies on fire
Universal galactic conspire
Igneous phoenix compels earth
Wayward shine enkindled birth
Effervescent radiance burns
Dog-day world slowly turns
Arising from ashes sublime
Grandfather tolls limited chime
Planets align chasing dawn
Grains of sand marches on
Dusky handmaiden Selene
Polishes quicksilver sheen
Take time to smell a rose
Infinite hours unverbose
Stars benevolently shine
Embed canvas divine.
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Comments
Lisa ? lol that's all I need to say.
Thanks not happy with it
Lol I wasn't happy with mine because it's our of our comfort zone, trust me it's good, that's the beauty of the challenges
I changed the last stanza
Lol who's the challenger by the way? In guessing it's you? I think Marion has stepped backΒ
Ok the new challenge is βgraveβ
It's good - you don't need to change anyting else.
Thank you kindly Terry
Wow, amazing images and language. You have an outstanding poetic technique. The figurative language of the piece is well done. I also enjoyed the metaphors.Β
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Thank you kindly Katina
My Dear Lisa,
The World's children smell a rose
While their Grandparents face a death imposed
We can only pray, its rate slows down
From people buried, under six feet ground
All my love,
Larry xxx
Thank you kindly Larry