Ride
Immortal sin......oh how you shine....
your pleasure truly is all mine....
so step right up, let's take a ride
on Donna's
manic
mental
slide.........
Hold on tight now, buckle up,
sip with me from insanity's cup,
before this frenzied mind does spin
so fast it sucks you deeper in.............
This isn't for the faint of heart,
so make your choice before we start???
However!
If your mind is grim
then step right up and hop right in!
For dark and nasty is my forte
all things evil bad and naughty!!!
Beware!
It's not a pretty trip for those that fight the
manic
slip.....
So take it!
Feel it!
Make it work!
Liberate the thoughts that lurk.
Allow your mind to run amok
forget the timings of the clock
this ride's not run on normal time
just chaos...
mayhem....
blood.....
and grime!!!
Oh feel the thrill! Such joyous rush.....
but wait......
a single moment's hush.
NOW!
Comes the screaming.....
Such evil!
Such spite!
My mind is ablaze with this glorious sight!
Pulsing with envy the green swirling mist
lips ripe and crimson... a true Devil's tryst
sapphire blue eyes turn your blood icy cold.....
There are things on this ride that can
NEVER!!!!!
be told.
Watch as the orange and yellows leap high,
flames spouted forth in a sulphurous sigh...
So toxic, so thick, a black writhing form
to show you it's wrong..... to desire the norm....
Such exquisite delights......never meant to be seen....
are yours to devour....
if you unpick the seam......
Give madness free reign, total power of you,
to unleash all the darkness that hid as it grew.
Please don't be frightened
i'll hold you real tight
While I tear out your throat with my venomous bite!!!
Please do not fear
just accept, feel the joy.....
While I torture and tease you my deviant toy!!!
Do you feel brave?
The door's open wide....
Come closer....
jump in....
let's go for a ride.
Hedonistic selfish glee
is how THIS ride prefers it's fee,
just give your mind for me to spoil...
I promise you,
it's not
a toil.....
This magic ride feeds on it's host!
It craves the thing you value most.......
Your conscience is it's chosen prize
and lust it uses as it's 'guise....
Blinding colours, fierce and hot!
A tantalising, beating pot,
just brimming full of wanton greed,
Immortal!
No more heart to bleed.
There's NOTHING that you cannot do...
It simply makes your dreams come true...
So step right up
let's take a ride....
on Donna's
manic
mental
slide.
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Wow Donna Even though the format did`nt turn out as you expected
it is so gripping needing to be read to the end , I can not imagine going on this
scary frightening ride with you .i would not be able to go through all the
scary things An excellent write and i think it has many other interpretations
of the things you described in the ride Debs x
Thank you so much! I wanted to create that grip to drag people in but wasn't sure it would work. Now I know it did lol.
You're right about different interpretations too. Of the 3 people I read this to before putting on here, 1 said drugs, 1 said sex and the other said madness. I'm glad if people identify with my work, whatever their interpretation.
Thanks again for taking the time to read it Debs.
Donna x
Hello Donna...
That sounds like a crazy ride...
I will bring my flying carpet just in case I might need...
Thanks for the ticket!
See ya soon!
Great write!
Thank you for sharing...
Hugs and Smiles!
sparrowsong
Thanks my colourful friend, i'll book you a space....x
I still think this is your best yet baby and I'm sorry it seems to have been overlooked. I have faith in you and know your time will come. I love you beautiful lady.xxx
This is a great read DONNA!!..... the flow of it has a unique regularity to it...... and the fact that it separates itself mid-way through..... so that the reader has several choices for the intent of its direction...... gives it more poetic value...... could be sex, insanity, drugs, or several intentions driving it....nut then, toward the end...... you go heavily into the gore and bloodlust of it...... at one point I thought it was about vampires...... but that's what makes it so poetic.... it's the reader's "minds eye" that creates its own interpretation ......making it truly malleable....... and consequently ......VERY poetic...... it's a fantastic fabrication my friend...... had to PIN this one!!.... so I could re-visit its uniqueness now and again.... because it would be quite difficult to repeat such a free-flowing mindset as is so eloquently presented here....... Bravo fear Miss Walton!!....... and......thanx for the "RIDE"!!...... LOVE and ROCKETS!!......T xo. ?
Yes, just as I suspected! I had indeed forgotten to press publish lol. Damn all this technology making our lives easier.....
Okay, appreciation take two lol. I am so pleased with how you saw it. You are spot on about how it could be interpreted in any number of ways. I don't think even I knew exactly what I meant but I just went with it and genuinely did allow my mind free reign, it was liberating and a little scary. Your comments mean so much to me because I admire your work greatly and strive to be as respected as you are. Thank you my friend.xo