Poem -
Sacred Corporation (reworked)
I am a minion
of your sacred corporation
though your words
seem in contradiction
to my power to reason
I sit quietly with the faithful
sucking on your nipples
like Romulus and Remus;
the ancient Roman brothers did
suppressing the urge, to stand up
and scream in the midst of your opus;
'Did you ever even love me?'
but conditioning has taken my will
leaving me with only doubts
and questioning
blind faith still clings to me,
but is enough to keep me, grounded
while hope, fuels dedication;
hope is the spring through which
all eternal promises flow
I can only pray, that all your promises,
will soon come to fruition
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Comments
Yo!! Mamma Mamma!!....... that is a KILLER closing line my Bruhvah!!......."hope is a spring to all eternal promises!".... wow....... sounds like Keats or somethin'!!......... this is a VERY aggressively poetic dig!!....... at the "corporation" of her at least! (lol)......... dude, I'm so missing you around here....... it's like you're in and out........ always out on the road in your big rig........ leaving me here at home alone (sniffles)......... awesome write bro!!............ love the Ball Sack reference!! (smiles)........... talk at ya!!........T xo
hey, T....thanking you for the comment, my pal....lol I think I took out the ball sack reference, edited this one to death; I think I will never be completely happy with this write, and will always be tinkering with it....yes I'm in and out, I guess that's true.....I've posted a few places, I like it here, for the most part....don't worry I will always have your back, T.....cheers
Cheers, Christopher! In this poem, I like the tension between reason, manners, and the other world (her). Very moving and hopeful, really. I hope the promises do come to pass! Also read your bio, wonderful that you are into music! And self employed! Let's you make your own schedule, to a point, and that is great for writers! Thank you for the evocative read!
P.S. I also really like the lines "sometimes I feel like standing up and screaming in the midst of your dark opus." Great lines!
hey Susan, glad you enjoyed that line, thanks for commenting....have a nice day
Dig it like a hole ! I see you, Poet. I now know to whom I speak.
August, you are a cool dude, I like all comments; even negative ones, but your words are unique, thank you kindly
I don't know how I passed this one up. This piece displays you dedication as a writer. I like all of your work, even when I don't get a chance to comment. Thanks for sharing Christopher
hey, Susan, thanks for reading, and making me read this one again as well, I just edited two 'buts' out; not sure why they were in there in the first place, this poem is very personal, all about my 'struggles' with how my religion is presented before a microphone, lol...I've always resented the idea of being spoken down to, especially when I've spent many decades studying something....I like what you said in the comment, sis, 'abstract detachment' is so right on, and I hate being like that....justifying it by reasoning that I am 'picking my battles' though that's not really true; I do see things I hate and tolerate out of 'manners' but 'cowardice' is probably a better word to use, hey, glad this one connected with you; even though it's a rework, cheers Susan