Side by Side
When I wake with you by my side ,
my heart is burning inside.
The burning is the flame to my soul that makes me whole!
With you by my side, I know I will survie!
Any perilous plan the devil may contrive, as long as you are by my side, I will survie!
Yes, with you by my side I feel so alive,
more and more each day with you by my side.
Side by side till the day that I die.
And even when that day does end ,
the burning inside keeps my soul alive.
Not even with death will my heart succome to cessation
I will wait for you by my Lord's side without hesitation.
Until once again you join me by my side.
hand and hand for eternity with you by my side.
Side by side walking in the sky.
For the Lord put us side by
side, so that our souls may not die!
Side by side for eternity, can't you see we are meant to be.
Hand in hand , side by side in the sky.
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Hi, thanks for sharing your poem.
I like the sentiment of the poem.
What I would consider revision is some light editing, some places that you could insert a comma that would make it even better. You could also format it, to resemble a poem. Like placing each main part in one stanza, to break it up a little. The space in between, becomes the imagenary part for readers. Just one idea.
Happy New Year 2020!
Keep writing :)
I will edit it. just wrote it off the top of my head in like 15 minutes. Thank you for the insight.
Wow, 15 minutes -- incredible!
Happy New Year
Just did some revisions let me know what you think.
Hey MIKE!!..... this is gorgeous....I REALLY like all the rhymes within lines you've delivered here....... not an easy thing to do.... while simultaneously conveying the powerful love that you have walking "Side By Side" with you daily......a VERY powerful piece of romanticism in a poetic formatting that comes across as a song-like praise of the Love of your life!!.......ALL STARS!.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!>>>>>>> T xo. : )