Death Song
Like 3 Pin it 0We made a promise in the darkest hours...
That the song of mourningย
Will be the choice of ours
Together you and meย
Whoever goes firstย
Will watch over the other at the cemeteryยSuch a morbid thought
Being on a high
Synchronalย thoughs can't be boughtย
Assurances of sincerityย
Promises between you and me
Blue whales adrift in the sea...ย
A another line we snortFor you the Smiths
Sing me to sleepย
Such a soothing riffย
For you to reap
I hope for you to forever keepย
The experiences of
Enlightenment we soughtยThe times we played Roller Truckย
The mind bending hallucinogenics
That we took
A slap dash write...
I couldn't give a fuck
Cos now it's true to meยThe candle is now short...
It once was long
Cypris Hill...
Another hit from the bongย
The Black Angelsย ....The Boat songย
Make sure it's played for me
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"[?Sinqinised?] thoughts can't be bought" ... I'm not too sure what the word "Sinqinised" means, Syd. Perhaps you will enlighten me?
I don't think this was morbid at all. Of course, consider the source that statement is coming from, yes?
I felt this had a sort of beauty.
Dark...absolutely, but in no way morbid.
Comforting, perhaps...
Nicely penned.
~Dean โ ๏ธ
To be totally honest Dean... I've had a good few drinks and this piece hasn't been thoroughly thought out. There Will probably be many typos and sentences that need editing in the morning.ย
If you have a spare 5 minutes though you could give the song a listen...my death song if you will lol.
synchronised thoughts is supposed to imply that two souls are on the same level without the need of drugs etc. Even though I mention drugs in the poem. I haven't had any by the way lol.
As always, thanks for reading and leaving feed back. Appreciated.
- Sydย
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Sure, Syd. I'll be more than happy to listen to your song.
So, instead of saying "Sinqinised thoughts" , perhaps simply writing Synchronized thoughts, or Synchronal thoughts, would be best?
Later, my friend.
~Dean :}
Thank you Dean. That sounds much better. I'll change it now. I appreciate your support.
- Sydย
You're very welcome, Syd. That's what friends are for. ?
Loved the song, very folksy atmosphere.
~Deanย :)
Cheers Dean. I'm glad you had a listen. Not many people like it but it's very me. By the way if you come across a copy on CD or vynyl it's worth a fortune. Quite rare - Sydย
Syd, I have always been quite partial to the darker side of poetry. I do love your pen, we may be kindred spirits
Thank you Lisa, yes I'm not one for love and romance.
- Sydย
I love to read the romantic poetry of Cherie, I have tried to write flowery stuff it just doesn't flow as well as the darker genre.
Hi Lisa, I too don't don't mind reading the romantic stuff and Cherie is so good a writer in that gener. I've tried it once or twice. I got it right once I think. My wife loved it but just isn't really my style so I do know what you mean.
Thanks again for reading, I always appreciate your feedback.
- Sydย