Poem -
steel trap
Like 2 Pin it 0In a steel trap
Caught by camera
There you are
Frozen with time
Racing through life
Yet where is time,
Where did you go
Where are you now
In a photograph,
A still shot
A heartbeat
Pumping the blood through your veins
Yet there is non,
The hearse is waiting
There is no escaping
What are you creating,
In a steel trap
Caught by camera
There you are
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ode to Jai, you are never boring or predictably vane in a write, thank you for that, first of all, I like how this write speaks to the reader, and seems to focus on at least two things, the certainty of death, and how 'moments' like a photograph, can last forever; good message.... you are a complex soul, my friend, and although the reader may be flat out wrong in the interpretation of this poem, there is so much meat on the bone to ponder, so many directions to go, and you have created a bridge between reader and poet and ulitmately that is the intent of most rational poets, so applause....this may not appeal to the casual reader either, in that it does require a bit of time and thought, but for me I like it, your story is worth some time and concentration....good, well intentioned, creative point of view conveyed nicely, cheers pal, Jai
Chris how are you going with
microbikini fetish!
Jai Shmai its humanity's fault
for causing this to be written
i am only the writer,
so I am one day visiting friendly Canada
to go microbikini shopping; we have
much to talk about, ode to Chris
microbikini see you soon!! :) Luv
uncle Jai :)
Great write,thanks for sharing, my applause, my vote
Regards
WILLIAMSJI MAVELI
Thank you Mr Williams,
I was rehearsing for death and
came up with this poem, God help
poets who help themselves to humanity's
desperate plea, save us!
Luv & good wishes Jai :)
Indeed, I see what you mean, much love xo
thank you Nardine, beautiful poet of
United states of America; how is
life in Ohio, here in Sydney we are
in winter! Luv from Jai :)
The day started with a spiritual mist over the water
Spreading as far as the eye could see, casting a beautiful
Illusion, that wonders never cease to exist,
I couldn't resist but to drink it in, heart and soul
Have a great day sweetheart, much love nardine xo.
Hey JAI MASTERS!! ~ Christopher said it ALL!!.... perfectly!!.......... much enjoyed brother.......... much to consider here!......... well done......... your friend and admirer!!..............T xo
Grazzl lovely man!!!
Pls visit me here.
Jai has dinner waiting for you.
Do you eat?
Liv & Luv Jai:)
REALLY? ~ how friggin' cool is that!!..........a better invitation I could never expect!!!!......... what's Grazzl mean?.......... I've visited Australia before......... and have many Aussie friends and acquaintances......... never heard that word before!!............ Is it some kind of food? (lol!).......... one day my friend!!........ if the good Lord's willing and the creek don't rise!!..........SMILES!!........T xo
Hello Jai,
I think I can understand how a photograph can represent all we have left of a beautiful love or soulmate that has transcended into the afterlife. I, myself, have been crying for sixteen months over one that was prematurely ripped from my soul. I pray that the hearse they left in, when it is my time, will take me to the same destination. A beautiful write, as I close this comment with tears from my eyes.
Peace and Love,
xox Larry
Sorry for your loss Larry;
death a part of life
hard i know to say goodbye to our friends
i lost my cat. Luv Jai:)