Submerge

Four walls submerge me,Â
Showing me the shadows,Â
that dance and dance,Â
craving and imploring my vulnerability,Â
I join them.Â
I’m cold,Â
It’s so cold in here,Â
The only thing here is a blanket of darkness,Â
Should I grab it or should I freeze?Â
The darkness shielded me,
Away from the fear,Â
Away from the world,
Wrapped around my neck like a scarf,Â
I choke.Â
I fall deeper,
Into the welcoming shadows,
There I stay,Â
Shattered and broken,
With a mind like mine.Â

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Comments
Wow, I'm saying that a lot today while reviewing an array of poems here on Cosmofunnel. What I like most about your poem is that is flows like a lyrical poem. I couldn't help at the end of it, to wanting to keep reading. I think you could add on to the poem, to make it even better. Although, as it is right now, is a five star poem.Â
Good work!Â
Grade: AÂ
Hello, thank you very much! My account is AmberH117 if you would like to read anymore! ?
Thank you.Â
I'll be reading more soon.Â
Happy New YearÂ
Hello AMBER!!...... this is a fine début piece......I could feel the struggle conveyed here...... with truly compelling phrasing creating memorable imagery that shines.......ALL STARS!!...... well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered poetic prose!!....... well done......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo. : )