Poem -
Submerge
Four walls submerge me,
Showing me the shadows,
that dance and dance,
craving and imploring my vulnerability,
I join them.
I’m cold,
It’s so cold in here,
The only thing here is a blanket of darkness,
Should I grab it or should I freeze?
The darkness shielded me,
Away from the fear,
Away from the world,
Wrapped around my neck like a scarf,
I choke.
I fall deeper,
Into the welcoming shadows,
There I stay,
Shattered and broken,
With a mind like mine.
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Comments
Wow, I'm saying that a lot today while reviewing an array of poems here on Cosmofunnel. What I like most about your poem is that is flows like a lyrical poem. I couldn't help at the end of it, to wanting to keep reading. I think you could add on to the poem, to make it even better. Although, as it is right now, is a five star poem.
Good work!
Grade: A
Hello, thank you very much! My account is AmberH117 if you would like to read anymore! ?
Thank you.
I'll be reading more soon.
Happy New Year
Hello AMBER!!...... this is a fine début piece......I could feel the struggle conveyed here...... with truly compelling phrasing creating memorable imagery that shines.......ALL STARS!!...... well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered poetic prose!!....... well done......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo. : )