"SURFING THE APOCALYPSE"
He sits alone in the dark
Staring at a glowing rectangle
That helps him speak with friends
Friends he's never seen
He succumbs to a simple truth
As he clutches at his face
With contorted fingers
For, he understands the thunder in the distance.....
He knows the Griffin's coming
And his heartbeat slows
And fires hot needles through his brain
The visions that he envisions
Are so powerfully etched, in his mind
That he can feel the breath of death
So he changes the computer screen
And dreads the darkness outside his door...
Crazy, ministers and priests
Shuffle hopelessly house to house
Facing terror in the eyes of children
As he sits alone, in the darkness
Hearing the horrors from outside
He types in, the unusual
can-you-save-me-jesus.com
For, he understands the thunder in the distance....
Pressure, tearing the flesh from his insignificance
He begins to bleed for his fellow men
He can feel the stampedes murmur
It paints rumors on his skin
And down, upon the pavement
Once, a solid land
That has become the playground
Where earthquakes begin, to eat the sinners.....
The air, chokes out life with ruthless tongues
As dogs fall down dead, on lonely streets
And simple drinks from polluted waters
Rip open the festering stomachs
Of the crazy-eyed, pregnant beasts
That roam through disaster riddled streets
And still, at home, in his wilting darkness
He stares at his computer screen
And types,
These letters
R-E-P-E-N-T........
Tony Taylor (Chicago)
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Hey T, I echo much of what Cherie said, the integrity and polished writer parts especially...I'm not sure what part of this excellent poem came first, the ending with ~~'R-E-P-E-N-T'...and then you back tracked to the beginning and constructed the setting or the whole thing came as a glorious doomsday vision, either way I admire your construction, very creative and certainly visual...at first reading I said to myself; Tony and I obviously have a different vision of the 'end times' and if you knew me very well you would know how much I enjoy a good argument, lol...but thank the Good Lord you brought me back to my senses with the repent part of the verse, and I suddenly realized that it doesn't really matter what vision we may hold of what will or may happen, the key part we both agree on is repentance...fantastic poem with a relevant theme and your ending is def. over the top brilliant...great writ pal, and how are you feeling? how all is well
Chris!!.......I get excited (for real) (lol!)when you comment brother..........seriously..........I had a moment of inspiration when this piece came through the birth canal.............but, as it ends with Repent..........you would think it came from the end to the beginning..........but in actuality.........began as an idea of a guy facing his mortality in the "crucial" moment.............the truth is.........I just love messing with words and their abilty to influence understanding......that way.........I get to participate in better conversations(lol!).....selfish? ......yes.........but still fun..........anyway..........I need you to come visit me ........and save me from my self indulgent self..............you have a way of bringing down from the clouds bro!!..........kisses(lol!)........T xx
Powerful piece, my friend...
thanx bro!!.....appreciate that!!.............T xx
Okay most definitely one of the best you have written! I love the ending...it literally gave me the chills. Only a few poems have ever done that and this one is so well thought out and thought provoking all at the same time. Wow. What a poem!! I sure hope you won that contest with this!!
With Love,
Val ♥
Madame Ambassador!!...'tis an honor sweet soul..........the fact that you went back and found this.........makes me want to hug you........LOVE that you found this one in particular.........I have always Loved the old Comics...........some of those words of yours.....made me bristle with happy smiles........CONGRATULATIONS by the way............I KNEW you were gonna be Ambassador.........just as I know you're gonna shine in the coming weeks...........thanx for your kind attention my friend.........love and rockets sister girl.............T xx