Poem -
Take this tear
Take this tear into your hand
take it with you across the land
When you stop you will see
a picture of you a picture of me
Inside this tear our time remains
all the nights you held me when I was in pain
look at it closer you will see
I'm holding you and your holding me
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beautiful write
Thank you so much
I love the way you write Melissa.... Enjoyed this
Cheers...Rose
Thank you for taking the time to write and for your comments
Hey MELISSA!!..... this is a lovely write.... you have a VERY strong sense of rhythm and timing in your delivery...... one thing.....I think this would be even MORE powerful if you broke your lines differently in your formatting (just a suggestion, please don't take offense)........ Loved this.........ALL STARS!!...... well done....... and......WELCOME to COSMO!!......T xo.Β Β ?
Thank you for your feed back I like honesty I'll try to figure out he ow to break the lines.Β