THE BEST POEM YOU WILL EVER READ ON HERE!
I wanna address the problems
Take the unfixable, your puzzles, solve them
An open ear is just what you needed
So you asked, you begged, you pleaded
But your pleas fell on def ears
We weren't in it for remittance
Just a couple of loves volunteers
You weren't in it for the long hall
Just a static, broken, long distant, collect call
Hold that line, as I shuffle for some change
There's a little more time now, but the fact remains
Like every lost call
For every player that dropped the ball
The dreams that burned, then burned us down
From the upscale, to the beggar down town
Time is all we have
So you wanna win
Take nothing, make up something, wipe off their shitty grins
You needed resolve
You grabbed, you asked, you got hard
But your bluff was the players advantage
Your best deals were all mismanaged
Employed by able workers, that fell short
Like villain with good intentions, contempt's court
Where you in it all the way
Or just an actor looking to play
Perhaps there's one more shot for you
Take that love, take the old, make it new
Like every lost call
For every player that dropped the ball
The dreams that burned, then burned us down
From the upscale, to the beggar down town
Time is all we haveLyricl
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That's right, I said it...
hey Anthony, nothing wrong with being confident, bro....poetry is highly subjective, though, I like your swagger none the less....you also got me to read it; good marketing strategy.... it's good, really good; the best? isn't that proclamation best left to readers? a poet saying that sounds odd; sorta like saying; look at me I got the prettiest hands in the whole wide world; odd statement....still I got to admit, it is a good poem....cheers
:) Who wrote the 'best' ? Shakespeare, Dickens or Wordsworth ? It is totally subjective.
In my opinion having read hundreds of poems on here this is as 'good' as any of those but no better. How do you define what is the 'best' ? Writing for Cosmofunnel is not a contest ! Your attitude is off putting to some considering coming on here who are not as confident as you.
This is a community ! This is a forum to encourage first time writers as well as showcase those with more writes under their belt. I am glad that you have had success with writing as this inspires others to 'pick up a pen'. Your attitude is your own concern ! :)
Wishing you all the best. :)
This poem is good to be honest and I don't know what kind of recognition you got in the past nor whether or not the V.I.P's for this site were placed properly but I know one thing. I don't write specifically for attention or even the lime light. I write because I have a story tell, this sites convenient and some people read my stuff on a regular basis. After some of the works I've done here I think I could qualify for a v.i.p position but I won't complain if I don't get my way, I know plenty of people that like my style regardless of my status.
Much love, Curious
Very nice Anthony. Confidence is key. Don't forget to show the rest of us some love! I am always quick to admire others as much as I admire myself. I read your poem twice I enjoyed it both times.
Made a video to help people understand writing. I Defiantly don't comment too much, but I'm too busy writing. I will try harder at that though, thanks!
Well-written, keep it up!
I think your poem or lyrics have a good message, but the way you portray yourself is very arrogant and not a respectful tone amongst your peers. I have been on this site for two years I see you have been for longer but I never heard of you. If this site ever has competitions again most of us know how to have fun with it and give one another support. Congrats on the fb promotion and remember this site is favored by the writers for its very supportive community and a great place to express your passions.