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THE LAKE (What Lies Beneath)

THE LAKE (What Lies Beneath)

The ripples off the lake in circles grew
from the heavy stone that skimmed as he threw 
Deep in contemplation he thought of his love 
that precious soul he put on a pedestal above

He asked himself what do I do I ve lost my mind to this woman
who drives me insane with her ways, which are inhuman
He remembered when they first met being in total awe 
the beauty of her, perfection with no visible flaw

Her skin was like fine porcelain with full lips of ruby red
and hair of cascading black ringlets, that sprang from her head
She was as if from another world on the outside ethereal, almost
but inside she was wicked cruel, her beautiful body just the host

He did nt know where to turn, what to do he loved her so much 
but he had began to feel the steely coldness. of her touch 
He knew she did nt love him he was just and end to a means
using him to get what she wanted they were nothing but fiends

He killed and she fed on the fresh warm blood, of who he had slain
but now remorse was taking over him, it felt like a physical pain
So one night as she slept he stabbed her, with a stake to her heart
her eyes sprang open,piercing and menacing in the dark
 
she screamed obscenities until death took her to hell 
he thought if only her inside was as beautiful as her outer shell
He had had to rid himself of her, she was evil to the core 
And now she rests at the bottom of the lake, as he stands watching 
the ripples of water splash on the shore....

 

 

 

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Lily Cas

I really enjoyed how you it transitioned, reading the first few stanzas I'd never imagine how darkly it would end. It goes to show some things aren't as beautiful on the inside as they are out. You're imagery was great as well. I could imagine her and her cold eyes as he stabbed her clearly in my mind :) 

xxxLily 

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Deborah Evans

Hi Lilly Thank you for your kind words 
I am glad you enjoyed, quite a different topic for 
me but I do enjoy writing narratives
Best wishes Debs x 
 

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Deborah Evans

Hi Cherie Yes she was evil through and through 
I don t really know where this one come from 
it started out to be romantic then by the end it
was a bit of a horror lol 
Glad you enjoyed Thank you for your great comments
Love n hugs Debs xox 

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sparrowsong

Hello Sis Debs...

A romantic beginning to a horrifying end...

WOW!

Great write! 

Thank you for sharing...

Hugs...

sparrowsong 

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Deborah Evans

Hi Sis Sparrowsong I  really don t know how this one
ended up being a horror. I was practicing romance :-)
Thank you for your comments always appreciated 
Hugs Debs 

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Mizzy ......

 Great tale Deborah.....with a chilling twist.....well penned !

Mick.

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Deborah Evans

Hi  Mizzy  I am glad you liked 
Thank you for your kind words and support of my 
work 
Best wishes Debs 

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Deborah Evans

Hi  Merrill Thanks so much for your comments 
always a pleasure I appreciate
Best wishes Debs 

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Larry Ran

Hi Dear Debs,

Another shining example of "beauty is only skin deep", and it's what "lies under" that is important. Beautiful on the outside, but a hardened core of evil.  This child of Satan, he sent back from whence she came, as the lakes ripples help repurify his saddened soul.

Hugs, Peace and Love,

Larry xxx

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Deborah Evans

Larry Dear friend I love to read your comments 
 you always get the heart of a write and they are inspiring 
in themselves. Thank you
Love n hugs Debs xox 
 

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