The Liar
More than joyous am I
Content to breathe the air
When out of the darkness
My lies, my indiscretions,
My soul is being laid bare
For it is into the light
And through the honesty
Of one's life and misfortunes
Where true baptism
Is rarely,
Anointed....
----------------------------------
Disappointed is he
Who mixes sweet recreation
Together, with healing's sleep,
For the lies he's told
In his dreams, unfold
The lust, unseen, and unknown
To him,
Steal from the world
And in life unfurl
God's most picturesque
And blackened
Sheep
------------------------------------
The liar, is blessed
With God's most
"close to the vest"
Holy secrets,
And treatments,
Of piracy,
And trust....
Tony Taylor
* another work in progress~
Support CosmoFunnel.com
You can help support the upkeep of CosmoFunnel.com via PayPal.
Comments
Not for the first time, you must be commended for your stridently subtle marshalling of rhyme; the second stanza is a masterclass in how to punctuate an unconventional rhyme-scheme in order to make the words dance off the page/screen and into the mind...singing all the while!
If this is a work in progress...that second stanza must remain intact!!
J ;)
Cool Brother JASON!!.....I think I know what you mean about the second stanza..... it's my songwriting background that I can't seem to keep out of my poetry..... plus. I've been recording and writing music A LOT lately..... not that I'm complaining.... it's just that I would like to be able to call myself a POET someday..... without hesitation!!....... comments lime these are helping me MORE than you know!!..thanx again my friend....... and...... stay groovy!!...... peace n stuff!!......T xo ?☀✴✳♥
A songwriter is a poet who writes poetry with the added dimension of music ... so don't give me any nonsense about calling yourself "...a POET someday", Taylor!! You need to update your Business Cards right now!!!
Keep singing and swinging, my friend...
J ;)
GEEZ LOUISE!!.... Sorry JASON!!..... now Ive got you AND Cherie ganging up on me!!!.....NOT that it's YOUR fault.....BUT maybe!! (smiles).....I think you both know what I meant......You've both been doing this poetry thins longer than me...., and I look up to you...... so when I'm not satisfied with my stuff.......I rely on my ear rather than the potentially beautiful panorama that PURE poetry offers !!.....I think I'll get there at some point..... but YOU are ALREADY there..... so BACK OFF BUDDY!! &YOU TOO CHERIE!!......I YAM WHAT I YAM!!......smiles & kisses..... to you both......thanx JASON!!....... for the fun, the inspiration, and the smiles.....T xo ?☀✴✳
excellent write like the line close to the vest linda wrote one called happiness
have a good night
Thanx!!......LINDA!!.....I'll go check out your write sweetie!!..,,,, smiles.....T xo ♥
Hello Tony...
Are you high again?
?
C'mon work in progress?
You're not a poet yet?
Seriously?
Oh well...
I won't tell you I think it's great...
I won't tell you it's awesome either...
You probably won't remember in the morning...
?
Hugs and Smiles!
Love and Rockets!
Feathers
Hey FEATHERS!!..... YES!! This is a work in progress ...it's my second re-write...., and for my favorite poems I do three re-writes so I can get them just the way I like them..... and NO I wasn't high!!...... and what I meant by not being a poet was that I consider myself as having 'not yet' reached the place where I'm comfortable calling myself a true poet..... when I read the greats I know I'm not.... but I also know I WILL be if I keep at it long enough!!.....thanx so much for the caring support and comments.....I love hearing from you!!!.....always......your friend and admirer!!.....,T xo x?☀✴✳♥
Wow. This is a very good writing right there.
-God's most picturesque
And blackened
Sheep- was the best part about it. I loved to read this part over and over.. thats a really creative way to put it. Profounding on so many levels