Poem -
The Maker
I thought I heard him coming
Yet his voice so far away
Madness takes me swiftly
As I watch him night and day
In the blue abyss, upon the dirt
Where children play
He takes whatever suits his fancy
And the rest he throws away
Eyes no short of dreadful
Not a soul shall soon escape
Instead they praise his name
And hope to enter golden gates
But sadly...
Nothing that serene
Or quite supreme for them awaits
He merely pulls upon their strings
Until their earthly bindings break
For where he sits is where he sits
And where he orchestrates his play
And here I watch in horror
Just a piece of the display
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Holy Crap ONLOOKER!!...... this is an amazing write brother poet !!......this could be taken several ways...... I'm not taking the religious route here..... to me this reads like "1984"......where Big Brother is watching....... but then a spiritual twist is interwoven and took this to a whole new place.......I Love the metering here too......a brilliantly compelling piece!!......." Just a piece of the display!!"........ALL STAR....... Love this!!...... miss you around here man!!.......LOVE and ROCKETS!!.......T xo. ?
Ps. Hope your God doesn't get mad at me!! (smiles)
Tony it is truly a blessing to be back just in time for Halloween and seeing you and Cherie's comments just threw the biggest smile on my face. I know who I can count on to always say hello no matter what. I'll be honest in the beginning it had something to do with religion but towards the end I twisted it to be about a toy maker mistreating "his creations". My faith is strong today but this is more of a view I constantly had in the past and want it to just be looked at as art. Haha but man is it good to know My friends are still here :)
Your own, Curious Onlooker
Hey CO, this brings back bad memories of my first day at school (hahaha I don't know why) must be some psychological reason, just eerie, not knowing what will happen next.
loved reading this one CO my mate, brought out feelings of uneasiness. A great write :-)
The bee that loved the flower!! Firstly I'm so excited to see the comments roll in one after another from friends that it feels like I haven't talked to in ages, much love to you brother poet. Secondly, I'm not sure whether I should apologize or say thank you for the compliment haha so I'll say I agree this was a very eerie one for me. I hope it gave you a feeling "appropriate" for Halloween time at least :)
Your own, Curious Onlooker
It's all good my brother :-)
damn it's great to see you! awesome write!
Poetess! I'm glad to see I'm missed! It's great to see you too!
Your own, Curious Onlooker
Hello CO...
Very cool write!
Welcome back!
Spooky...
Thank you for sharing...
Hugs...
sparrowsong
Sparrowsong! Thank you for the compliment friend. I thought it would fit well with Halloween being right around the corner. Great to see you again :)
Your own, Curious Onlooker
Wow... There are so many things in this. Of course the first thought is religion, but then I went to the current political climate here in the US and nearly cringed with fright. This flowed with force and tempo that made me feel like I was on a terrifying ride. I still have the adrenaline rush lol. Wow, nice to meet you, Rebecca
It is nothing less than a pleasure and a blessing to meet you Rebecca, excuse me I'm excited to finally be back. Thank you for your lovely compliment and yes the political turmoil is just a big mess that I do my best to not touch to often everyone has opinions and contradicting ideals, it's insane but never the less I'm excited to meet you and get to read your work. I hope you become as big a fan of mine as I know I'll be of your work. Much love beautiful
Your own, Curious Onlooker
Hi C.O So great to see you back here i miss your
awesome work like this one full of scary imagery that
takes you on a mystery tour in your head to who" HE" is
love the phrasing rhyme and flow of your write as always!
A great write as Halloween nears
Best Wishes Debs
It's quite a shame that I miss when I receive such beautiful comments and praises for my art. I'm deeply overjoyed that you missed my works so I missed you as well and all my friends here. Much love sister poet
Curious
I absolutely ADORE this. Great poem (:
Thanks so much Ashley it means a lot! ☺☺
Curious