Poem -
There Is A Light
A Poem about Hope & New Beginnings
The heat from the sun warms my face
I close my eyes
Within the beauty of life
For just one brief moment
I feel alive
There is no pain
The weight of the world
Vanishes
From my sight
I cannot see my mistakes
I forget your face
I am here
For this single moment
In time
A new aroma of light
And warmth
Sweet and bitter smells
Lively sounds
Radiates my whole being
I am my garden
The garden is life
We will both grow
Develop
Bloom
And
Tangle
For a brief time
Life will continue
Even after it dies
If only for this one
moment
What a beautiful sight
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Lovely wording
luv xx
Gave full votes but its not working :(
Thank you for the review. I'm trying to come up with new metered poems, which is much harder for me then freestyle.
Yes well iv never done freestyle xx
That's interesting as it come so easy to me. Learning how to use stresses in English, a much harder task for some. Thank you for the review. I'm working on writing a Shakesperian Sonnet and a Villanelle.
I'll have to read more of your poems.
Thank you again for the review.
Awww Thank you for reading mine Katina luv yes I find rhyming easy but not freestyle xxx???
I write way too much in a comment :)
Awww but Ive wrote alot of my poems when out walking solo in hills and sea shores so can’t seem to not rhyme lol but thanks luv, I think we have to just let our hearts pen whatever is naturally comfortable.. I’ve done 1273 poems within 2 years when I started sat waiting on my sister in hospital, she had cancerous mole and I began to write and never stopped since haha xxx
Incredible!
Have you submitted any of them for publication? There are publishers that will pay for poetry. I have a friend who has written several articles and a novel, she only submits her writing to places that pay. She has made a living from her writing. That is the dream. With that many poems, you could have a few collections to publish. Keep dreaming and keep writing.
Hi Katrina,
That is quite beautiful.
Honestly, I don't think it requires any punctuation, and I think it would take away from the simple, yet deep, beauty of the poem. Too many commas spoil the soup(Isn't that the saying? lol).
Terrific writing, and I like the way you try to help Jillian, very nice. I'm like her, I can't write anything without rhyming it, but I think I read too much Seuss as a youngster...and now I'm flummungster(yes, it's a word! It means 'dork who rhymes things').
Anyway, I'm glad I read your poem, I'll have to read more.
Great job,
Matthew.
I had an English professor who said in class one day, we used commas like using a salt shaker. I knew he was talking about me! Oh, so much to learn about writing.
Thank you for the reply. :)
You're welcome, Katrina. I overuse them, also, I think, some,times, I, even p,ut them in th,e midd,le of word,s, and it drove my E,n,gli,sh(triple comma word) teacher cra,zy, t,oo. Oh well,,,,. LOL.
Nice to meet you.
Ma,tthew.
Ha-ha! What a clever and very unique way to reply. I'm still smiling. I poke fun at myself all the time for misspelling the simplest of words. I'm just now learning to pronunciation and sound out the stresses in words.
I really need my books and other material on tape to full absorb what I'm reading. Most of my poems will reflect my limited vocabular, which is why I frequently give much higher ratings to poets who have a rich vocabular. It's a goal for the future, to learn a lot more. To spell better and to reach more readers with the same emotion that it took to write the poems.
Again,
Thank you for the review.
I've had so much fun since being
a member here. Back to the basics
of English -- for tomorrows metered
poetry.
You're so nice, Katrina, thank you.
(I'm so sorry that I call you Katrina, but I can't help but type it because I think of Katrina and the Waves(Walking on Sunshine). Please forgive me.
I'm a wikked gudd speller, but not in the area of words. LOL. Actually, I'm a pretty good speller, and have a decent knowledge of words due to a love of reading, but to me, you seem to be really intelligent, and quite a good writer, so don't worry.
It is a lot of fun on here. I joined not that long ago(and I wish I could put in more time, but with work, and everything), but I wish people were a little friendlier. Maybe they are to you, and maybe I kid around too much, but I've only got about 3 friends on here, who chat with me, and comment on my awful poems. Maybe I'm not that good, but I do get some reads, and yet no comments. Anytime I read one, I comment, because everyone is trying, and we're not professionals, you know? Oh well. Thanks for taking the time!
Matthew.
Thank you so much.
What a sweet person!
Thank you, Katrina. You know, I don't think anyone would ever notice that you have ANY problem putting words correctly in your mind, because you're so intelligent and together, but I think that's awesome that you studied English at Ohio State, and I think you're great. Buckeyes always have a good football team, too.
I know! I wish people were more like that, too. Like one, big, poetry family(craziness and all). Sometimes I write crazy ones, too, and maybe my sense of humor is odd, or awful, and I rarely get comments on those(besides the wonderful Cheerie, and Jillian, and Greg), but it's just fun, and they could at least say 'nice try, you're an idiot, Matt!' LOL. Oh well. I guess I'm too gregarious sometimes.
I seriously over-drink coffee, also. I love coffee. Once I drank 300 gallons in a day...then cranium exploded. lol. I don't know how people don't drink coffee, I would sleep all day.
Hey, don't worry about droning on! I like it! I don't get many chances to chat.
Thanks again!
Matthew.
PS. I know, I think they should have a thing on here whereas the people you follow, their poems pop up in a bucket, or something, so you don't miss them. M.
Thank you so much.
Feel free to send me a message here, when you have something new to post. Maybe I can get a sneak peak, before anyone else has a chance to write you a review.
I had sent you a huge note, but thankfully there is an edit option. One of my bad habits, is to write then send, without giving it one last review.
Oh, I like the bucket idea, like a pop up. Like Face Book has for when you get a new message.
Thanks again.
Those are some of the most thoughtful and beautiful sentiments I've ever read, anywhere.
I'm sure we are going to become "poet best friends"
One poem at a time.
I hope so, Katrina.
I really enjoy talking to nice people, like yourself.
Thanks for being another bright spot on here(I was almost ready to give up). Hey, did you notice these comment boxes getting smaller, closing in? I did a test with a cool girl who used to be on here a lot, and, if you keep messaging back and forth, they actually shrink down to one line! It's a little known fact about Cosmo, but it's pretty cool, but only if you're not digitally claustrophobic. lol.
Hey, thanks Katrina!
Matthew.
Oh stop, I'm still laughing. I'm on the floor. That's too funny. Hey, did you get a chance to read the poem called: Hairy Butt, or Butterfly? I laughed so hard reading, Hairy Butt, that now I can't stop thinking about that poem.
I leave comments on here like it's "private" but in reality, it's not private IM's. Sometimes I forget and just start typing my life story. Then, I race back to the comment box, hoping I will remember where I left the un-spell checked, chapter length group of text.
I just now noticed the squeezing sensation on here. Oh boy you were right and I'm terribly Closter phobic that is funny. I wonder how small the boxes will become. Weird. Okay, I'm off here for a few hours. Tomorrow, a new day.
Hey Katrina,
Thanks for brightening up the site today. It's good to see people who just feel relaxed enough to have fun, and make friends. You're really cool.
I have not seen Harry Butt yet, but will possibly think about checking it out. LOL. Does not sound really appealing, and I pray there's not a picture, but I'll take your word.
I just say anything without thinking, too, but usually it's nice things, so don't worry.
Anyway, nice chatting with you on here. I'm not usually on on the weekends, so I'll probably see you Monday.
Thanks,
Matthew.
Hello again and yes, I think the space has decreased a bit.
Here the links
Butterfly
https://cosmofunnel.com/poems/my-hairy-ass-177912
https://cosmofunnel.com/poems/butterfly-177928
Thanks. You too, Katrina.
You're a fantastic person, you should get out more, I'm sure everyone would enjoy your company.
Have a great weekend. We can finish this next week, and you'll see how tiny it gets. It's an amazing thing. LOL.
Matthew.
Wow is english your second language? amazing poem! Different without punctuation, not better or worse; just different.
Favourite lines:
I close my eyes
within the beaty of life
For just one brief moment
I feel alive
Thank you Curtis for reading and writing a review. :) The end is my favorite too.
Dear Katina,
I would not change one iota of this beautiful write. You will notice from my comments to others, that I often make them in poetic form. I give you this haiku.
Golden rays warm me
Permeate my heart and Soul
Illuminate life
Love,
Larry xxx
How thoughtful, your writing continues to inspire me Larry.
I bet you have a lot of haiku's written. I'd like to check them all out sometime.
I'm partial to longer epic works, however the short poems can pack a punch depending on the subject. Some of the poetry I have posted here was written when I didn't know where my three sons were, most of those poems are heart-wrenchingly sad, so I wasn't sure about sharing them.
I wanted to write you a haiku, since you post new haiku's in many of your critiques.
Larry Ran, a Haiku
January 3, 2020
Larry Ran Can Write
Within each new day and night
Learning to Live Life
My Dear Katina,
I end every poem with a Haiku.
I thank you for the beautiful one you wrote for me.
I would like to hear about your three sons, in a private message.
All my love,
Larry xxx
:)
what a great poem
Thank you, Greg, I appreciate all the feedback.
This is one of those poems I wrote on a good, warm, sunny afternoon, when life was less chaotic, or maybe after I had prayed. Sometimes, I walk a mile around the garden, I return inside to pray, then I open a MS Word Document and just start typing, sometimes the alphabet, until something happens and the words come out.
I like lyrical poetry and narrative the most. However, I feel like I'm not living up to my full potential, until I learn all the styles of metered poetry. Which is a huge challenge.
I'll be sure to check out your new poetry.
This is the fun part of being a creative writer.
That’s what I do I go for a walk and I say a prayer every morning when I’m out walking and then read the Bible in the afternoon it always gives me a good feeling you have a wonderful day peace and love to you
I'll tell you something funny about me and my reading habits.
Reading written text is hard for me to understand at times, so when I tried to read the Bible for the first time, I read the first part and the last part first. That scared the heck out of me. I was reading the Bible (literally), when in fact, the Bible is full of metaphors.
There was a class at OSU about the Bible, I wanted to take it but it didn't pertain to my English major. I plan on getting the Bible on tape when I can afford it. So when I'm walking, I could just listen to the words and maybe a narrated Bible, to help me make sense of it all.
You have to admit, the early versions of the Bible, show a revengeful God who would punish you to He** for sinning. Then, the book is edited and changed to reflect more modern ways of thinking.
Thanks again.
Katina you should be so proud of yourself. What a beautiful well written heartfelt poem. You put my mind in a different place that was quiet and tranquil. Well structured and obviously written with alot of emotions.
Thank you for such a wonderful reply. It's 6:27am, and I couldn't wait to log back into cosmofunnel. It's been a long time since I shared any of my writing outside of Face Book. Receiving the reviews is what helps a writer to learn and improve.
Thank you again.
Have a lovely day with
plenty of new words to rhyme.
Katina,
I wanted to congratulate you on your win. Very deserving indeed. Great writing! Love, Terry Kay
Thank you, Terry. When I wrote it, it was during a very complicated time in my life. But on that particular day of writing the poem, the sun had been shining all day, the warmth after a long winter had finally warmed the soil so that I could begin planting in spring. It was a great day, full of reflection. I had lost my family, but Dennis had found me and helped nurture me out of the past, and into a very large garden.
I spent day and night working the soil, building on to the garden, praying, wishing, hoping and begging a higher power, to lead my three sons to me one day. And, in the end, they all found me. I have a good relationship with two of my sons, and now I'm going to be a grandmother (however), the relationships I had in the past, have been damaged to some degree.
The day I wrote the poem, it was a day to remember, I found hope again. The hope was the garden and my husband for always telling me, "Your three sons will be coming to look for you in the past, it took ten years. I never stopped writing or planting in the garden. It was a way to escape the pain of loosing three sons. Today, I know where they are at, and they are all doing well.
Thanks for the reply. I just felt like gabbing this morning.
PS. For anyone looking for their adopted children, once they are 18, you can go to:
G's Adoption Registry (If USA) Adoption, they have Search Angels, to help you find your children, they don't charge a fee. But what I learned was, my oldest son Jason found me by pulling up one of my poems I had written for them online. The other son, found me on Face Book and walked over 30 miles to reach me.
Oh Lady that must have been so hard but you never gave up. When I was sick and confined to bed I lost my son for six years but he came back and we are very close. Funny thing is I had a huge garden after I was able to get up and going again. Grew enough to last till next year. I would go out and work and work that garden. It was pretty. I always said I was working my sadness away.
So touching that your son walked over 30 miles to see you. That says it all! They love you! Nothing can replace a mother's love.
Glad you were a little gabby this morning. I enjoyed hearing from you.
I am 63 now and single. I have 2 sons , one is 43 and the other one is 27. My youngest just moved off our 6 acres and lives 100 miles away. It has been an adjustment that isn't quite over. It is strange with no son at home. Boo hoo.
Thank you for writing me. I am a bit lonely. Little bitty bit. ?.
You have a talent for writing. Glad you are on Cosmo. I don't get on like I use d to but I will be looking at your poems!
good evening love. Terry Kay
Heyy great work and congrats !
Only just came ccros thiz one kat
Thank you Edward.
I'm learning that when we feel our worst, we tend to write about darker themes and subject matter. The day I wrote this poem, it was bright and sunny, warm and inviting. I felt the image captured the mood for a week. I think about that day when I feel a sense of pain and solitude in my heart -- that, if we hang on through the storm, the sun always returns and even when we have made great errors in life to pick something that we are good at, embrace the future of change.
I really like this one