Poem -
unwanted change
i remember the night
the night i wasn't there to witness the end
of a beauty so pure and true and good and there
he was there, but not
2 souls collided
2 minds connected
but he ran
too close...too amazing to forget
everything and yet nothing
the love
i remember the day
the day that life changed forever
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Hi LIZ!!...... this was such a compelling read...... the kind of write that comes back to you through admiration from others...... its brilliance lying in its staccato delivery.... the short, succinct, heartbeat..... speaking directly to the minds eye of the reader....." The one who got away..." etc. ~
~ "...of a beauty
so pure
and true
and good,
and there he was,
there,
but not......."
An absolute pleasure to read my friend!!...... and an unequivocally profound, "Unwanted Change"...... brilliant.......Bravo????❤.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo ??✴❤❤✴?
your comments are so poetic and heartfelt. thank u. he was the one who got away, in many ways. i'm glad u found pleasure in reading it and that it affected u.
Yeah, I can completely relate to what you've written here in this melancholy musing, Liz.
The rat-tat-tat, machine-gun-like burst of words cascading down the page carry this right along from its inception to the climactic conclusion.
When read aloud it creates a smooth-flowing collection of eloquent words and phraseology that linger in the mind long after the act of reading is done.
Bravo, Liz.
Well penned.
~Dean Kuch?️
thank u. how ironic u wrote what u did, as this poem is about my friend who was shot and killed. "7 misguided bullets" is also about him. i'm touched that my poem lingers after being read.
Wow, that IS irony, isn't it?
And I had no idea.
I'm very sorry to hear about your friend. God knows we can't have enough good ones in our lives.
The pleasure was all mine, Liz.
~Dean ...♥♫♪?♪♫♥