WHEN THE DEMON COMES TO CALL
The hurt is all consuming
Foreboding is so strong
Fear's circling my heart
Don’t feel like I belong
The torment of my loneliness
Is playing with my head
No wanting or desire
My mind is all but dead
I’m living like a zombie
Feeling like a fool
Wanting to give in
Looking like a ghoul
This mental torture’s playing
Such havoc with my guts
Find it hard to function
Acting like a klutz
No one understands me
Myself; don’t understand
What happened to this man so brave
A long forgotten land
Missing my friend sanity
Don’t want to socialise
Paranoia is my mate
But fills me with such lies
I’m forgetting how I got here
A thing called hopelessness
Life slips on a downward track
Circumstance; such stress
I held it tight for so long
A person; strong and good
Worked; supported; cared for
Loved, like all men should
But pressure took its toll
Sucked the fun right out of life
Made me feel just like a failure
Cut through me like a knife
These things they come to get you
At a time you feel most weak
Don’t take pity on the good guys
Makes the future feel so bleak
Fault was not in question
Blame; not something to be laid
An illness that can get you
A price that must be paid
So when the hand of human kindness
Reached towards me; pulled me out
Of a big black hellish hole
It saved me; there’s no doubt
This hand was oh so gentle
Peach skin; so soft and kind
Healing hands that held me
And comforted my mind
Patience was a virtue
Constance was her name
The mindset of the demon
For her; was much too lame
The prowess of her handling
Was enough to tame the beast
My heart it could now calm
The monster now deceased ....
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another good piece hon x
Cheers hun :)
wow!!!
much enjoyed rachel
a broken soul finds redemption!
a beautiful thing indeed!
hey rachel
im still thinking of this one!!!
something about this write reminds me of a song by grant lee buffalo, "a demon called deception"
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6EfuDqnaKFc&feature=kp
check it out if you get a chance
his other work is really good too!
wish you well
I take that as a huge compliment that this reminded you of this song. Â Just listened to it Stephen and loved it;Â very haunting, gave me chills. Â Thank you for going to such trouble. Â Much appreciated :)
absolutely!!!
I would also recommend "fuzzy" and "rock of ages" if you ever get curious! both are by the same artist, grant lee buffalo! believe he grew up in northern California usa! got some folk sounds to him!
anyway, wish you well Rachel and much enjoy your work
take careÂ
Cheers Stephen your reading and kind comments are much appreciated! Â I will do, glad that you liked it, this is one I wrote a while ago now. Â Will definitely check it out, thanks once again :)
Really gets to the emotions quick, and still a happy ending. Â Great tell.Â
Thanks Jonathan, glad you liked, your comments are much appreciated :)
Thanks Chris, really glad you liked it and could relate. It's a sad place for anyone to be and I think maybe why writes like this are commented on is because more people understand than would ever really be able to admit! Your kind comments Chris are truly appreciated, thanks :)
I really like this one!!! It reminds me of something I wrote but of course yours is far way better than mine :)Â
Val ♥
Which one was it Val, I would like to read it! Â Thanks for your lovely comments as always :)
brilliant write rachel congrats x
Cheers Susan, much appreciated :)
Lovely capturing of the feelings and emotions of people who find themselves in a dark place in their lives. faved. Well done and congrats.
Thanks very much Paul, glad that you felt it did it justice, and thanks for the fav :)
I love the way you seem to effortlessly, yet so descriptively write and this piece for me tops the cake..Mental anguish is a deep emotion I also enjoy writing about ..big fave and vote...really loved it Rachel x:)
Thank you so much Carey, your kind comments are always appreciated. I think when you write an emotional or emotive piece, it is almost easier to put together; don't write from your head but your heart (or as I do in some cases the gut lol!) :)
A wonderfull write Rachel..:) great feelings..liked it..!
keep writing..!
love
Surabhi
Thank you so much Surabhi, your kind words are much appreciated :)
So so true...The heart never lies and the head confuses everything... lol..... Your reply has actually given me a new idea for a poem.. Thank you Rachel :) x
Couldn't agree more Carey! Glad I could be of service, you're welcome ha ha :)