Poem -
Until
When I am gone
no space to fill,
no sound to make
no time to kill,
no tears that stain a cheek so soft,
nor fly with larks high up aloft.
An empty roomย
is empty still..
When I am gone
When I am gone
The stars and sun
continue in their princely realm.
As winter chills dissolve to spring
andย flowering buds are opening,
each seasons charm will leave its mark
as nests are built,and still,the lark
soarsย high aboveย and sings of love..
When I am gone...
When I am gone
the song we sang
will silent stay,
thoโ toll bells rang
a mournful beat of pulsing heart -
now still,
remains forever yours
and will.....
until, until,ย
and still,ย
until......
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Comments
This is yet another beautifully written piece of work....if only you were a newcomer ..you would certainly get a nomination for this!!! .. as you should have done for your last 3 pieces!ย .how the judges overlooked them I just don't understand at all. I guess we just have to draw our own conclusions dont we?..you must have upset someone haha! .only joking ..you could never do that Lodi! Nonethelessย we are all so lucky to have your wonderful works to read and enjoy and show us what proper poetry actually looks like....dont ever be dispiritedย or stop writingย asย so many of us on here love and look forward to readingย them...you are truly talented !ย ย
Aw bless you Stevie xxx
Lodigiana this is soooo pinned ! really beautiful
Nigel
That's really kind of you Nigel!...I never really thought of myself as being particularly romantic but I seem to be going through a whimsical phase at the moment so its good to know that you enjoyed this one...mood couldย of course change at any time ha ha!ย
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phenomenal masterpiece, my friend.
I'm really touched- thank you hun xxx
until....what a lovely write if only you could turn this into a musical piece with highs and lows, well done dearย
Maybe I need to ask our resident musician,Tony,ย to put it to music!..I do sing but don't write music at all..I'd love to be able to though! Thanks so much I'm really pleased you liked it xxx
:) i was unaware tony did music and who knows maybe we'll hear you sing one dayย
Such a concise and ethereal touch, in this piece, friend. Well done!
Tehmina xo
You are so kind my friend! thank you, very much xx