Poem -
Wonderland
I'm falling down the rabbit hole
onto a saintly hell;
and though i look up and see you
I wish I've already fell.
At the bottom is glass and rust-
pain and cruelties and lies;
Of sinister animals in button up coats
all but waiting to rise.
And so i tumble down
past pictures of us-
past memories-
past dreams-
past mirrors of me crying-
crumbling at the seams.
And in the story,
Alice found wonderland at the bottom of the hole-
but all I'm losing is my soul.
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Comments
Deep philosophical expression of active mind. I like it.
Ravindra Kumar
thank you !
Hi Gina,
Wow this is wonderful, and it appears you were reliving all the past failures of loveĀ once had, now to be lost, in hopes of replenishing what use to be, yet at the end of your fall existed hopes of lost desires...You are a very imaginative poetic writer and the world, as well as your poetry, areĀ your tools,Ā utilized primarily, to cover your past hurts and pain and you do it so well but realize your fall, appeared not continuous in this write, although not the most comfortable objects to want to have to break your fall,(broken glass and rust), you came to a standstill, at the falls end and the key word is stand. Pick yourself up and climb out the same way you fell in for it seems in this poem, the hole did not close and all appeared to be lost souls can be refound..And in this poem ,I trust that you can...This is a wonderful poem of your past life passing before and the feeling of all hope of regenerated love of life and/or love in general being lost forever....Job well done.Ā
Take Care,
Jim
thank you so much, honestly thank you that comment was so wonderfully inspiring and in itself poetic! thank you, i try to take pain that ive built up inside me and let it out in a thought provoking, creative way, as most poets do. I feel like that really makes poems and poets wonderful. taking the bad and turning it into something beautiful.
Good write Gina, My applause, My Vote 3* NominatedĀ
Regards & Love
WILLIAMSJI MAVELI
thank you so much for your vote and your presence ! great having you read my poems !
Wow Gina this is fabulousĀ creation vibrating lot of hidden treasures with in.I love the way you compared the life situations as tumbling down a rabbit hole and craft fully youĀ conveyed regarding broken dreams ,hopelessness,failures in life.I am in love with this work of yours.Thanks for sharingĀ Gina.
Cheers.
Thank you very much! x