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A Sound for Sore Eyes

A Sound for Sore Eyes

Here it seems we
Have a single thread
Laid bare for all the
World to see
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Fragile faded worn
And frayed
Like some discarded
Pair of old blue jeans
...
Yes and yet within a
Whisper and a single shoutย 
More coveted than golden
Worm casts
...
A word was spoken loud
And became a melody
Falling light upon the
Ears of deaf men sweetly
...
Like a feral choir bursting
From some fragile nimbus ย 
Mouthing sound to
Sacred long lost hymns
...
Unsynchronized yet
Splendid shy and proud
Twas then the words
I love you could be heard
...
Through walls and
Windows of cathedrals
Recited from the mouths
Of angels smiling
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Such sounds did play
Upon the mind and
Retinas of a blind mans
True imagining
...
Mid scent of dried
Decayed and drying herbs
There in vague shadows
Senses spun and wheeled
...
Each drifted down in turn
And wrapped him safe
In colours he could feel
And taste and smell and hear
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For it was time
He bade farewell to
A would be goodly
Sightless melancholy man

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Gwendoline

Hello Neville, me again :)ย 
I cannot deny I am loving the depth you take the reader.ย 

ย "Like a feral choir bursting
From some fragile nimbus ย 
Mouthing sound to
Sacred long lost hymns
...
Unsynchronized yet
Splendid shy and proud
Twas then the words
I love you could be heard"

I mean wow, really this is splendid penmanship. you conjure such wonderful emotionally driven imagery here. That speaks to the reader of how raw and pure in nature love is.ย 

I find myself reading your words multiple times, because they are so dense in imagery, which is a wonderful gift to have in your hands my friend.ย 
A brilliant melancholy write here. infusing the senses, manipulating the imagination of the reader beautifullyย 

I am a fanย 
Gwen :)ย 

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Neville

Bless you dear Gwen and truly, I am blessed n tooly too :)

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Marion

You have a fantastic way with words my friend...the reader gets side tracked in strange imagery finding they have to read several times before the meaning presents itself...which to me...in this... is a man trying to be reborn in love...or let go of bitterness. Your style reminds me very much of a favourite poet on here who has since left. How I miss the deep dark works of Icarus flock...it's a shame he has left I think you would have enjoyed his stuff. Pinned of course x

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Neville

How extraordinarily kind Marion, if my smile gets any broader, I fear it could cause serious damage to the top half of my face ......................... In the meantime, I shall keep my eyes pinnedย open for good old Icarus x

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Being Me

Neville, Neville, Neville!! This is just superb my friend. So often in life we find ourselves lost in some dark place for many, many different reasons, and throughout this time we look for things beyond the everyday that might just prove to us that we areย  indeed, loved. When the material cannot cut it we look to the spiritual and it is here we find our solace. My own personal cathedral is always found among the trees. It is in the natural world where I find spiritual solace. And this is what your poem speaks to me of. Truly original and honestly written. Wow!ย  I love this poem x

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Neville

Many thanks from me to thee my friend .. I am so very grateful for your visit and encouraging words .. I kinda like trees too :)

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Being Me

You are very, very welcomeย  oh...and ...๐ŸŒณ๐ŸŒฒ๐Ÿ‚๐ŸŒฒ๐ŸŒณ

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Neville

Now thats wot I call a real treet :) ๐ŸŒณ๐ŸŒณ ๐ŸŒฒ x

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Being Me

๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ

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Neville

Me too n truly tooly :)ย 

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Neville

More appreciated than you might imagine Greg, many thanks ..

Cheers mate :)

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Jim "The Lad" ....

wonderful word play! congratulations!..................................................Jim

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Neville

many thanks indeed sir and much appreciated too ....................ย  Neville

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Leah Yodico

Great write; congratulations, a well deserved nominationย 

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Neville

My very dear Leah,ย 

Firstly, please do forgive my seemingly late response to your heartwarmingly encouraging and otherwise uplifting review comment ..

My only excuse is that I have been out of the country and have a new mobile phone that really doesn't like me at all and refuses to allow me to get familiar with it ...

Under those circumstances and since I have now returned home, it (the phone that is) will be going back in its box and returned asap ..

Despite the number of scribbles I seem to have posted here I am a relative newbie and am still getting to know my way around and so am not sure what I have been nominated for .. but a massive thank you for letting me know that I have been ..

Having said all that, I really am most grateful for your visit & shall return the favour write now .............. Nevilleย 

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Leah Yodico

You're welcome...and thanks for reciprocating the same.
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Wilford Barker

Absolutely Brilliant Ink Neville.ย 
Pinned of Course.ย 

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Neville

I am absolutely thrilled that you took time to visit, consider and leave something behind my friend .. Many thanks indeed ... All Good Things to you and yours sir ... Nevilleย 

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Neville

ย  ย .. Bless you POETESSDARKLY .. Make me smile why dont'cha :) x

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Lorna

Hi Neville,
really fantastic peice,
engulfed all of the senses with some stunning imagery.
loved this
lorna x
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Neville

Hey Lorna, what a lovely thing to say .. Many thanks indeed ............... x

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Haylee Curry

happy i came across this, had my heart doing some kartwheels throughoutย 

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Neville

what an extraordinarily kind thing to say .. I am absolutely delighted ..ย 

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