A Touch of Death
Come with me,ā he saidĀ
āIāll take you to the deadāĀ
Crooked fingers reach to touch my hand.Ā
An inner voice whispers its concern
and yearns for me to step back from the water's edge.Ā
To pledge this shall not be my final breath.
But I feel tired inside.Ā
I cannot deny the tempting waters that crave with every gentle wave,Ā
a desire for me to dieĀ
And all it takes is one stepĀ
A single foot, by hook and crook he would cease my need to breathe
Would my soul then be freed?
Or would I be in the hands of the damned?Ā
Mist creeps and crawls across the grey waters.
Any colours that once caught my eye, fade into monochrome,Ā
as flowers and trees turn to stone
Dismay breeds within - mind in disarray
I try to weigh up all that has beenĀ
My life suddenly feels like a dream
Something of a mere fleeting chanceĀ
That vanished in a single glanceĀ
Shrouded by his gaping hood.Ā
He stands with outstretched hands
And breath which stinks of rotten fleshĀ
āLet me help lay you to rest.āĀ
Yet inside a voice detests
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What a wonderful poem
Thank you so very much for reading and liking my poem today ?Ā
Youāre so welcome
A real dark ink, this one! I like how you portrayed death in this. With his stinking breath and bony fingers (who would want to go there?). It fits nicely with the fact that the feeling of suicide is being fought against. Interesting and dark. The first two lines really dragged the reader straight into this one. They promised a good read and it was certainly that!Ā
Thanks BM :) such a wonderful comment and so glad you found this piece an enjoyable read. Beaming from your reaction and forever grateful x
Oohh...I can see him there in the misty murk...step back step back!!! Excellent write my friend ?
Thank you ever so much, so glad you enjoyed it and so grateful for the like too ?
I have voted also hun, if it's not showing it's just a Cosmo glitch...it does that sometimes...it will show when it rights itself ??
Oh wow thank you so very very much ??
Gwen you really hit the ground running and grab a reader's attention from the outset and bang! take said reader on a bible black venture and your closing line brilliantly radiates a change of heart from a deeply troubled soul.
It's great to read another poets imagination and when that imagination is dark, it grabs my attention tighter and makes this heart beat a little faster.
Thanks Gwen and remain poetry enriched my friend.ā¤ļø
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And it seems there is a touch of death in trying to give 5 stars.
And more than a touch of colourful language!
Thanks Shaun for your fab feedback. For taking time to read my older works, and to leave your much welcomed thoughts :) As always you are so generous. Happy writing my friendĀ
Gwen x :)