Addiction
Seductive whispers in my ear, drawΒ
the shape of my uneven mind-
I project into my rough terrains,
the ebb and flow of my tides swell
and move my being back,
forth, back,
sway.Β
A consumption of consciousness,Β
hungry for every
bit of stimulated ecstasy,Β
till the tide lingers-
pulses, binds, constrains, forces, pulls
every ebb of being from my essence,Β
shading the colours of sightΒ
with black shrouded greed,
the need for more
need.
But there is nothing left in my mountainside.
The empty web of despair corrodes the
crevices of bright memory, attacks
the desolate soul at the heart of
dead sparks, staring eyes-Β
Sway back,
forth.
Crystallised eyes forget the being
that hides in the small left ventricle-
I drag at my crevices,
crackle and weep,Β
for my unwavering funeral.Β
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Comments
??? really like this, the imagery of the intricate detailing is really good! ???
Thanks so much for checking out my poetry Wayne, all feedback is great feedback. Really appreciate it x
Great poem, I especially like these lines
"A consumption of consciousness,Β
hungry for every
bit of stimulated ecstasy,"
Well written - SydΒ
Thank you Syd, I always enjoy knowing what stood out to others when reading this poem. I appreciate the feedback.Β
Many thanks x
amazing
Congrats on the nod from administration!!...... and may I add...... Truly 'Well Deserved ' (which is not always the case)......... your talent is showing...... Proud to say I know you!!... In a cyber-sense!!....... wait...... actually.....I Don't know you well...... oh my!! ?.......however, I can say....... that from what I've experienced by reading a handful of your pieces....... Your pen stands out amid the sea of huddled masses...... and I feel fortunate to have found my way (somehow)Β to your razor sharp insights and poetic manifestations of your humility and more than gifted offerings!!..... Bravo!!....... your cyber-friend and admirer!!.......T xo ??? β₯β₯ ?β³
Thank you so much dear poet, it is truly such a blessing to have been recognised in some capacity for my writing... I am truly appreciative of your comment and support. You do know me, at least my soul, through reading my writing, there is a little piece of me in every poem.Β
I am so honoured for you to say such things, I am so happy that you feel as though my writing stands out. That is all a person can ask for when expressing themselves artfully! Thank you again, Tony, for your outstandingly kind and generous words.Β
With love x
Very well done! This piece is written in such a way asΒ
In such a way as...?Β
Thank you
I do apologize for that incomplete comment. My phone crashed and I couldn't finish.
Your words depict the dwindling spiral of addiction...the various stages that lead to imminent demise. Very well done.
No worries thank you!! I just wanted to know what you had to say, hehe. Thank you and I'm very appreciative of your comment!
A well deserved win.Β
congratulationsΒ
Thank you very much Leah!
Nicely penned, as are all of the works by you have been that I've had the pleasure of reading.
My sincerest congrats on your contest win.
~Dean Kuch
Very high praise Dean, I am humbled by your words. Thank you for your support, and I hope to continually improveΒ
You're more than welcome.Β :)
Hey congrats! Β I was nominated as well and only just now checking out the winners. Β I really likedΒ
A consumption of consciousness,Β
hungry for every
bit of stimulated ecstasy,Β
till the tide lingers-
pulses, binds, constrains, forces, pulls
every ebb of being from my essence,Β
The overall feel of this piece was beyond my capacity to critique as your style is quite different from mine but congrats once again on a clearly well written and vivid expression of struggle. Β Different style or not you certainly have talent ???
Thank you for your kind support of this piece, it is never beyond anyone's capacity to critique, as I hope for readers to derive their own meaning from my articulations.Β
My style is densely metaphorical and requires a concession of thought, of which might be hard for some to grasp. Our style differs in that you prefer an explicit/straightforward narrative sentence structure, from what I can see!
Keep writing, and thank you again!Β