Poem -
An Unkind Brittle Mind
There was dread in her eyesย
Time had traced its fine linesย
Into the confines of a brittle mindย
It sought only to brood
on the misconstrued frailtiesย
Those which collapse a soulย
and sharpen the sword of self doubtย
She clasps her tearsย
Swears to be devoutย
And yet...she fearsย
She cannot live without...
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Fantastic picture to represent here GWEN!!......After reading this 6 or 7 times now....... I am seeing the emergence of a woman who has not only dealt with a lot in her life but has internalized and bore the brunt of the mental anguish that comes along with it....and in doing so has begun doubting herself......but there is something else going on here that I can't quite put my finger on......I hope you will fill me in on understanding that final stanza!!.......what can't she live without?.......ALL STARS!!......Beautifully crafted my friend!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xoย : )
Tony, many many thanks for reading this a number of times and leaving me your thought provoking comments. The final stanza
She clasps her tears (she holds back her sadness)
Swears to be devout (swears to have faith in the reasoning towards even those negative things. To not doubt)ย
And yet...she fears (yet deep down she fears)ย
She cannot live without... (she cannot live without doubt/self loathing)ย
in other words. She really wants to find strength and reasoning in those moments that make her feel suffering. But she fears she just canโt stop slipping into a negative stream of thought and feelings.ย
Thanks my friend for stopping by. It is always a pleasure to hear your thoughts on poetryย
Gwen x
wonderful poem
Thanks Greg so glad you liked it. Sorry for the late reply. I hope you enjoyed your Christmas xย
Very nice Gwen.
Many thanks JP, always such a pleasure to have you stop by. I hope you had an enjoyable Christmas. Sorry this is a late replyย
Gwen x
to suggest that these few words are collectively extraordinarily good would be a gross understatement ....................................... x
Thanks Neville, so sorry for the late reply. As ever you are too kind. I hope you enjoyed your Christmasย
Gwen xย
No worries wotsoever Gwen .. N x
Short , Sharp and Superb , Excellent Gwen !ย
P.S I have nicked your title for a poem of my own , I hope you enjoy !ย
Wishing you a happy Sunday , Chris :) x
Chris wow wonderful to see you here on cosmo. Thanks for reading and for your kind words. I am flattered you chose to use the title. I will definitely pop over to your page to readย
Happy New Yearย
Gwen x
Wow Gwen. I had to read this a few times. Its mega deep and powerful in its short lines! I love it. Beautifully excuted. I read the comments which explained the last line too. Pure elegance radiates from your pen...from you...even the most somber ones. Pinned! Px ๐๐๐
Insecurities are sooo hard to let go of!ย Great writing. I am sorry I missed this until now. Wishing you all the best for 2022 xx
All the very best to you too Tina. I do hope 2022 is a good year for you and your loved ones. Thanks for sharing your wonderful thoughts xxย
She hates the mirror of time, she finds the not so fine lines and crosses or gets cross at them all.ย
Causes she feels too small, not aย point struggling with the plain to see.ย
I guess death is the only destiny.ย
โโโโโโAlmost saw the face in the cracked mirrors of the mind.ย
Wonderful poem for a concept I and every woman knows well.ย
Hats off fair Gwen.ย
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Wow Liliana I do love your commentary. Many many thanks for these splendid words xxย
Gwen, I hope I haven't offended you in any way, I haven't seen you grace my pages for a while. I know I'm not very good at the few words of my comments. I read so many poems that I try to be quick with comments to go on. I truly mean every comment I give to my favorite poets.ย
You are a wonderful writer and fabulous contributor to all here on cosmo my friend โค๏ธ