Poem -
Back to you
Make a wish,
Change a letter,
You`ll make it better,
When you're next to me.
You don`t have to speak,
Perfect, present in company,
A bond that seems more real.
Then just a dream.
We drift in endless oceans,
Where the waters feel so deep,
Where the rain gives birth to hurricanes.
And the learning curve is tragic – steep.
For freedom, is for the many,
And temptation of a few.
The understanding and words vary,
But its only, very true.
No matter,
My problems,
My worries,
My mistakes.
I would change nothing.
If it`s that's what it would take.
I`d do it again
Just to lead me
Back to you.
Love instead of hate.
The Fish of the Sea.
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Hello TFOTS...
This is heart breakingly beautiful...
I read it first and then I listened...
WOW Amazing indeed!
Thank you for sharing...
Best wishes and blessings!
sparrowsong
Awww thanks so much, Sparrowsong! Just seemed to come to me, as per usual in my morning shower.... I'm really glad you liked it though! Smiles and peace to you. And again, Thanks so much.
Hey FISH!!....the Heart of this piece is So VERY beautiful!!....I can see why SPARROWSONG said "Heartbreakingly Beautiful" in her comment......it's all in the flow and the elegance of your phrasing.....you REALLY get it when you hear this being read aloud!!......ALL STARS & PINNED!!.....Bravo dear poet brother!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!........T xo : )
Awww thanks so much Tony! Although you have managed to catch me at a really inconvenient time lol! I was just finishing up! I'll be back but I got to run! Thanks again my friend
I finally got back to you Tony! Thanks so much for your comment, it really means heaps coming from you that you like my flow and elegance. What I'm trying to say Tony is your a real inspiration to me and your work is masterful and probably worth more than this site can offer. So again, it really means so much. Hope you are well and smiling~ Your friend FISH
A more than well written poem that delivers its melancholy message and journey in spades and as you say love instead of hate.
Max this is one if we're honest, is one we can all relate to and for all the right reasons from life's learning curve.
Thanks for writing and sharing and five stars and pinned for a reread for then you may discover the little nuances a reader might have missed.
Thanks again, your friend Shaun.
Awww thanks so much Shuan! And so very true, life is a learning curve and although it seems very steep at times it's those that are there with us that push us though and up. And thank you my friend! Being unique is one of the things I try desperately to reach (although how likely do I succeed? ;). Thanks again my friend really appreciate it. Peace and smiles to you.
Such a heartfelt write. It's beautifully delivered. Sometimes life can be so hard x
Awww shucks my friend... I'm really glad you liked this one. So very true Tina! But it's the people in our lives that make it easier. Thanks so much my friend. Peace and smiles. Max
Absolutely stunningly beautiful
Awww shucks thanks so much!
Max I absolutely love this and this particular stanza just blew me away. Absolutely amazing. Your imagery here is so immersive and holds such a powerful message. I could not not pin 📌
such a stunning read ✨👏🌻
Awww, thanks a million, Gwen. I`m really glad you found this one, it means so much when you comment on my technique! I know I can be nonsensical at times but thrilled you found the meaning.
Are we speaking, in double negatives now eh Gwen? XD
Again thanks for your support.