Poem -
Brain Exploded (Prayer)
(FiSH Poem) 1
Up and down
Round and round
In Laughing, we drown out
The patience and pleasures
Of carnival sounds
I built up new waves
They crash
They burn
And It’s just a mad dash
When will we learn?
Take our time
And concentrate
Procrastinate through poetry
Never lead to temptation
Never write to give hatred.
Yeah so, my brain exploded.
And I`m lost and I`m frozen,
So please just
Let me,
Thaw out new oceans,
And leave me anew.
Let me
Focus on goals
Work as hard and just view
The mountains from treetops
Just as high as I`ll go
In the loneliness slog
It will be worth it
Just hope.
Amen
(FiSH) (Freedom in Success and Hope)
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Comments
Max another superb well written message poem that delivers in poetry spades. Great lines about thawing out new oceans and leaving you anew, to start over. A clean slate so to speak.
You also use the words loneliness slog and how it will be worth it, that's the journey of life and so true.
Great images to fill a reader's mind and you end on the word hope.
Hope, my favourite virtue.
'Hope is a good thing, maybe the best of things and no good thing ever dies.'
(Andy's letter to Red near the end of Shawshank.)
Great poem and a great read.
Thanks for writing and sharing Max.
Your friend Shaun.
Awww thanks so much Shuan! Felt that I needed a bit of a refresher, but so glad you liked it. I look forward to catching up on all that I have missed! Peace and smiles to you my friend. Thank you so kindly
Awwww such gorgeous positivity lil Fish of you beautiful sea ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️💙💜💙
Awwww thanks so much Jill! I know I dont look at the bright side of life that often! I'm glad you enjoyed this write. Kind regards my friend. Hope you are well
Awww 💜💕❤️Yes I am well luv Stay safe luv XXX
Same to you Jill!
❤️💜❤️
Gorgeous poem! Such an air of truth, you always out do yourself in your poems. A wave of poetic power, great job Max!
Awww thanks so much, Bell, I have no idea how you give me such praise ;). Just a simple poet my friend. Your biggest fan. Max
Top notch writing Fish, your poem took me on a journey
Awww thanks so much my friend Mr Wolf! Glad you liked my work. Been really busy lately but hope to catch up on reading soon. Peace and smiles always. Your friend Fish
Fantastic poem Max, I really liked this one, the message and the flow was great, pleasure to read my friend ☀❤