Poem -
Broken Souls
Somewhere a woman child believe that she was never loved.
Somewhere a mother gran stares through uncomprehending eyes.
Somewhere, somehow two lives have drifted slowly by
with only pain and hurt the common factor.
A woman child that hurts for love that simply walked away
and yet blames other people that the father didn’t stay.
A mother gran who always loved despite no love received
and now feels lost, abandoned and utterly bereaved
Comments
Well written and a sad tale.
Hugs
♡M
Following you.
PS
Continue writing from the heart.
That is always the best place to start!
♡M
Hey LYRICA!!....this is a VERY compelling write....... life has a way of making "Broken Souls" from relationships influences....... but like you said it can be VERY cathartic to write about it!!..... you've found a good place here to begin your journey...... some VERY caring and capable writers here..'...... you have a strong sense of rhythm and timing.....,. this is very well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered........ so, like you said to me, don't stop writing........ you have a gift for expressing yourself with words.........ALL STARS!!..... and WELCOME to COSMO!!....... LOVE and ROCKETS!!.......T xo. 😉✳✴
what an emotional piece of writing, Lyrica....love your language, so expressive lean clever...your opening line speaks volumes, great foundation and characterization as well, amazing to me how you told a story so quick; a testament to your writing skills, such confidence rise from this one, a superb read, poet, enjoyed
'Somewhere a woman child believe that she was never loved.'
a sadden truth displayed in fragments, though much was left unsaid, there lingers, that which cripples the soul..