Poem -
Carry Me With You
Where will I find you now?
In the memories we made love. Just close your eyes and think of me, you will see
How can I feel you near?
In your heart my love, where you hold me dear
I miss hearing your voice...
Just listen to our child, you will see, he is the very echo of me
How do I live on without you?
Did you not just hear all I said? You carry me with you in every step
Support CosmoFunnel.com
You can help support the upkeep of CosmoFunnel.com via PayPal.
Comments
Pinned because you get it and I understand your poignant words. Sometimes I feel like this Gwendoline but other days it's not enough. I want proof, 100% proof ...I want to visit my son and hug him one last time. I want him to show me where he is!!! I want to confront god or whoever!!! Most days I am quite bloody mad with grief!! ..more than mad...outraged!!! There you go...see what your poem did 🤪😬
Anyway your beautiful words have brought comfort love...albeit...temporary...hugs 💕
Marion 💛 I totally get that. I wrote this to remind myself on harder days/nights. When my bitterness rages and I long just to know. I am so sorry for your loss. Grief is the hardest weight to carry in life. They say time is a healer. I hate that phrase. Most of the time you yo-yo and why wouldn’t you? They were your life. It’s like a piece of the jigsaw is missing and nothing can ever replace that piece. You can try and distract yourself, fill the space with something else. But the picture is never the same. Thanks for the Pin and lots of love and hugs to you 💗
Yes...you do get it. There is no journey just a pit. There is no moving on you just surpress it enough to function. There is no acceptance...just exhausted resignation. The world is dimmed.
I have had loss before of course but this one...off any worldly scale!!! Hugs right back at you love...❤️❤️
wonderful poem
and hugs from me
Thank you Greg 💛 hugs back atcha 🌻
WOW!! GWENDOLINE!!......this is such a compelling read and filled with uniquely served phrasing......here's what blew my heart wide open ~
~ "Just listen to our child, you will see, he is the very echo of me..."
One of the most profound, creative, and truly heartfelt phrases I've ever come across here on Cosmo!!.....and I have to say that the FORMATTING of this piece really added to its impactful effect!!.......ALL STARS & PINNED!!......Bravo girlfriend!!.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!........T xo : )
Tony, I don’t quite know what to say. I am just blown away by your lovely feedback on this piece. I use to struggle with structure. So whenever you bring up the structure of my poems it literally makes me beam, thank you ever so much. I often wonder what he would tell me. So am so pleased that a part of what I know of him touched people today. Yours just put the big cherry on the top, I was in disbelief. Really made my day 😊
Thank you Tony 🌻
Hi Gwen. Wow I love what you have done here to write about grief is this simply effective way. There is so much power in these lines and like rob said that 3rd verse is fab. Sssoo pinned for its originality and style. You are fast becoming one of my favourite poets!! Px💜💜💜
Pratibha, thank you so very very much. I plan to read more of yours. I absolutely loved your piece I read. Thanks for taking time to read and leave feedback, I am forever grateful ✨🌻💛
Oh I so love the way you wrote and put your poem together Gwendoline.
Superbly well woven and so dramatically so.
A beautiful moving piece beautifully written with its tour de force lines to reread.❤️
Five stars and pinned, but it's not about the honours, it's about conveying your message and you have accomplished that so well.
Thank you for sharing and hang in there and I wish you well.
Hello Shaun, I can’t thank you enough for your attentive feedback. It is truly appreciated. I am so glad this piece spoke to you. Having a conversation in my head with him can happen a lot. Thank you for your support and encouragement ✨🌻💛
Well written. Theres a lot I want to say about this. But I can't ... and that is no reflection on your poem. Your poem is good 👍 x
Life shows us the captivating dark, as well as the light. In being without another a struggle to further your expressions and impressions ensues. Helping you better understand life, what it means, and what can be. And, what can not.
Neat composition. :)
Thank you Richard. I agree it changes your perspective and values. Thanks for reading and leaving me your thoughts :)