Poem -
Comin' on strong
I never asked you to fall at my feet ~ I understand the lack and it's need ~ this, unrequited diease ~ that's why we get alone ~ we both share it ~ comin' on strong ~ I'm the drug that's in you ~ but I won't be-long.
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Yay !
Let me say this.... I know this poem had much else to say. You choked on purpose to serve brevity. But I must walk away knowing what you could've said.... and the anguish is palpable.
As a reader I feel robbed somewhat. but that's ok for now.
Please revisit this work and expand it. Thoughtfully.
You may benefit from the effort.
I Know We will.
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I am going to revisit 'comin' on strong' at your request.
I think you are an AMAZING writer! Any and all comments/critiques are welcome and in fact asked for as I simply write from the heart/mind and have no formal training what-so-ever. Of course, to me, when it comes to arts, i.e.; music, lyrics, poetry, the only rule I follow is break all rules. Rules guide everyone to some specific format. Original things follow only the creators will. Rules be damned. But....I'd still like to know about some of them.... at any rate, look for 'comin' on strong (er)'.
Thanks,
Neil. Florida