Poem -
Dark Horse
Profusely pounding hooves in thunder,
Snorting and nodding through shadowed glades.
Galloping beast lay peace to asunder,
Lunar eclipsed chasing stars in fade.
Charging wreath, indomitable soul,
Reaper in watch hooded in shroud,
Wind swept majestic spawn of foal,
Glisten of eyes beneath lightening cloud.
Matted tussle and bloodied mane,
Forcing and trouncing and neighing in wail.
Dark stallion is not of our plane,
His master in watch under darkened veil.
Hunters in guide beyond grey death,
Incessantly searching never in fail,
Chaperones await after last breath,
Surpassing our knowing on a different scale.
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Amazing... you are so prolific! The imagery is outstanding. An awesome theme, I adore the cadence. just one small typo... I think you meant plane...I believe plain means ordinary or non-ornate. Not trying to be hyper-critical, I by no means am an expert..but as a fellow poet, we all want suggestions. I expect you to point out my little oops too
Thank you so much!Β I'm normally a stickler when it comes to grammar and spelling, oops lol.Β Thank you again, it's now corrected!
I can see you've obviously had some practice writing poetry Simon. Brilliant imagery and rhyme. The poem kind of reminds me of Lord Of The Rings where those dark hooded creatures are riding horseback.
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Thank you so much Syd!Β I kind of picture that too.Β I started writing again in November after many years of absence and now I just can't stop writing lol.Β Thank you for your kind words and support.Β It is talented people on here that give me confidence, ideas and creative influence!
That's a good thing. You're welcome for the support. I wrote a handful of poems about 10 years ago and then stopped. A good friend of mine encouraged me to strart writing again about 2 years ago. This was the first site I uploaded them to and I had some positive feedback. Now writing is more like an addiction but I'm still learning.Β
- SydΒ
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Same here!Β I want to progress and be successful.Β I want to write children's books and also a novel but I need practice.Β Poetry is in me to do already so I'm just opening the flood gates but people like yourself and others are what drives me, thank you.