Poem -
Drought
Twisted ā the taps.
Thirstyā I lack.
The tools and thoughts
In surviving intact.
So - let's explode.
When life gives you lemons.
Of course, you all know.
But recently, these thoughts,
Just really hit home.
I feel like a
A Laughingstock
So ā Let`s make broth
A soup out of sadness.
Inner warmth for the void.
My patience ā destroyed
Boiled laughter and joy.
The risk to avoid.
And sand between the toes.
And the crowd ā that all froze.
A realisation, as we drove.
Our spades into dust.
Through our shoes.
And our clothes.
To watch it all blow away.
The Fish of the Sea.
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Comments
A sense of hopelessness about this one Max, or maybe a sense of...'whatever'...
The older we get the more we realise how little control we really have over anything. Enjoyed the read x
Ahhh, thank you so much, Marion! It does seem that way these days doesn't it... Glad you liked it and thank you so much for your comment, my friend. Peace and smiles to you as always~
Yes my friend let it all blow away like dandelion seed and carry your good wishes to green pastures..Ā
Awww shucks, Liliana. So kind of you to say! Peace and good wishes back to you my friend. Glad you liked this one ;)
Awww abfab my
lil fishy of freedom š¹š š¹
Thanks so much, Jill!! Glad you liked it... sometimes it's hard for me to get the flow right and I wanted to try a few different styles with this one. Peace to you my friend...
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Oh wow Max this just spoke to me so much. I have been trying desperately to find some inner warmth for my void. This poem just swells the readers emotions. It can feel an endless life of digging in that dust. You have left the reader with a clear vision of the impact of feeling destroyed by life. A marvellous write my friend. So very impressedĀ
Your friend Gwen x
Ahhh thanks so much Gwen!! Worth the wait eh? Yeah, it seems I have been a bit worn out by life at the moment... I feel touched that you are impressed!! Thank you kindly. Usually, it's Rob who manages to nail my favourite section of the poem, but alas, you got it this time!! Peace to you my friend. Max
Aah yes Rob is so attentive and good with his feedback. It is missed. Glad I spotted your favourite part. Looking forward to your next piece my friend :)Ā
Yes... deleted his account again... has his ups and downs... hope he resurfaces soon. But yes, a prize to you Gwen! Perhaps that gives me inspiration for my next write hmmm.
Oh boo, he does suffer internally a lot poor thing. Letās hope he comes back. Well you inspired me to write ;)Ā
Thanks my friendĀ
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I know that barren dusty desert too well. Fabulous poem Max x
Ahhh yes, don't we all Tina... hopefully I`ll get more inspiration soon! Peace and smiles to you, I hope you are well my friend.
Peace and smiles right back atcha! š x
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Very nice Fish.....
Thank you John! Glad you liked it!
What a super creative write , your emotions and feelings really bled through with all your comparisons and I found it superbly impressive how you took things so unfamiliar but effortlessly worked well and created an intense and captivating read. I sense your imagination is in abundance based on your creativity .Ā
kudos to a great write -Shallow WatersĀ
Why thank you Shallow waters! Glad you liked my write. Ahh yes, I tend to dwell on the abstract a bit, keeps my poems away from my problems so to speak. To be honest it's a first to for someone to say effortlessly. To be honest... it didnt come naturally to me, heaps of practice and reading other people's work. Thank you again for the kind words. Hope to catch up soon. Peace and smiles!