Poem -
Fantasy RIder
Give me a fine horse
If I could pick a final wish
It would be nothing other
Than to be astride a fine horse
Galloping in a lost country
Feeling the power of my ride
Letting them lengthen out
Breath blowing out, and hot
Hooves pounding the rocks about
We are flying,,we are soaring
Two as one you can only see
A horse and a rider racing free
Away from all life's difficulty
I do not care to pull her back
She is just a rocket on the track
Ah but our time here is done
Horse and rider had some fun
Even if it was only a fantasy
Horse and rider had some fun
If ony for a fantasy run
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Comments
Nice!
Thanks for taking me on the horse ride with you. The poem is very descriptive.
Favorite part:
Feeling the power of my ride
Letting them lengthen out
Breath blowing out and hot
Hooves pounding the rocks about
(There is one part that needs a space, (blowing out and hot)
Nice job here showing the scene. I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Thank you for sharing.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment,. I also caught some typos,, due to your insight,, awesome thanks,I am blind without my cheaters,.and should never type without them.. thank you again
violet
Thank you for the reply. I'm still rusty at writing reviews and I never know what star rating to use. So glad I found the website. There is much to learn from reading other poets work. I'm having fun, but will work on my review skills. I've been out of school for over 12 years.
I am glad to reply and glad to have you comment, You do not need to do anything to your review skills.. they are great. It is badly needed here if one wants to fancy themselves a writer of any ilk to have
comments that show flaws, or perceived rough spots or where in their opinion something should be changed. IT is welcome if you are trying in any seriousness at all and I have been ,
violet
Hi Violet,
Thanks for the reply.
I'm learning a lot by being here.
I'm now following your poems.
Thank you