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Haiku'd you be so cruel?

Haiku'd you be so cruel?

Your Viperous words
Rip my aching heart apart
Where has kindness gone?
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lodigiana

I love your play on words with the title Β very clever!! Great Haiku -says so much in so few words. Β  Perfect!! Β  Xx

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StevieC

Haha so pleased that you spotted that! ....thank you so muchΒ 

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Dean Kuch

This 5-7-5 poem features good double intendre and syllable count, Stevie.
However, it is hardly a haiku poem.
The challenge is that the misunderstanding of haiku as simply a 5-7-5-syllable poem in English is so deeply entrenched, and some people are so deeply attached to it, that it’s hard to let go of.
Hiaku is an epiphany of sorts having to do with mankind's relationship and how it pertains to nature.
Haiku may be written in seventeen syllables, or less. The following haiku was written by Matsuo Basho; one of the greatest haiku poets of all time. It is titled, "In Koyoto"
"In Kyoto,
hearing the cuckoo,
I long for Kyoto.
"
The kigo here is implied as the cuckoo bird in Koyoto only migrated there in Springtime.
Haiku features a "kigo", or seasonal reference: ie, "frigid winds whine", or "Summer breeze beckons", things of that nature, to coin a phrase. The haikuist doesn't have to come right out and say summer, spring, winter or fall. It can simply be implied.
The main thing haiku is best known for is the satori, or final line, featuring that 'Ah-ha!' moment this type of poetry is s well loved for.
Follow the following link and read up on the differences in haiku and 5-7-5 poetry a bit. You might be surprised by what you learn.
http://www.nahaiwrimo.com/home/why-no-5-7-5
~Dean Kuch

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StevieC

Hi Dean, appreciate your detailed comment and will take a peep at your suggestion

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Dean Kuch

You're very welcome, Stevie.
Haiku is an ancient poetic art and very impactful when done properly. It's also more challenging to write than most people think.
Good luck on all of your future endeavors.
~Dean.

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