Poem -
Helter-Skelter
Neath tranquil ivory chill
Lays a niche deep and still
Solemn slumber solstice await
How doth beauty contemplate
Patience a virtuous campaign
Upon a wondrous gilt grain
Gleefully stoic on twilit hour
Verbose tis springtide flower
Tulip feast on morning dew
Unto mortals grant anew
Along meadows thou shalt grow
Helter-skelter tepid row
Vibrant color call to arms
Imbue thou posy charms
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Comments
A beautiful calm and peaceful write my friend...enjoyed the read ?
thank-you Marion
Awww beautifully charming xxxβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈ
Thank you kindly JillΒ
U so welcome luv β€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈ
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Aww ty beautiful red rose ?β€οΈ?
A rose by any other name nary as sweet as Jill.... ?Β
Awwww u r a little βοΈ
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poetess darkly your back!
My Favourite poet...
A Brilliant write as usual.
Thank you kindly Iβm always here to please lol
Omg wow .honast to god not just saying this cuz u comented on my poem and this was the first one i seen in your catolage...
but i am trully amazed with this workΒ
for one " helter-skelter " is one of my alltime favorite lines ( and top 5 my fav beatles songs)Β
for two LOVE the freeflowing anstractedness of this one i get so much from it its too much for wordsΒ
and three i was always impressed with your vocabually ( tho sometimes intimadating) .
but sometimes .like this one .love how you use words that i have no idea what they mean..but you have a very impressing way in using rare words that are self defining ..like ...i dont even need to look up the defenition they just srlf explain in the beautifull web you spin .
omg seriosly cant pick a favorite lineΒ
i wanna sayΒ
" Helter-skelter tepid row"Β
but that whould be biased only cuz helter- skelter is always been a fav of mine ..
also love the first line
" neath tranquil ivory chill"Β
again BRAVO .β??
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Lol I think Iβve missed you most of all Edward lol thanks for the warm fuzzies and the outstanding comment
Your poems are outstandingly profesional and consistent. I dont comment as much as i should due to shear lazinness because im not a computer person( still dont even one and never have )?..i still do everything on my " space phone " ( what i call android and i phones)
lol
Β but i do when a comment is beyond deserved.
But theres somthing about this oneΒ that i feel is world class ..
im not fkin around or just being nice .i get a wealth of emotion and provoking thaughts ( a norm from your work ) butΒ
idono what it is about this one i cant really pin point why i feel so strong about this one but its magical and my amature poetry knoladge and skill cant put it in words other thanΒ
BEAU-MAGIC-AMAZING
you know Edward my head is gonna swell and I might just float to the moon with all that flattery lol Spring is one of my biggest inspirations. I'm truly touched you found this as amazing.
i seriously dont mean to overwhelm you with flatery.it might come across ..too much or somthing lol..justΒ
sincary enjoyed this peice .
something else i noticed from this piece is the "sensual imagry" idk if thats even a thing but its somthing ive been trying to achive lately .
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like not imaging a imageΒ
but imagining a feelingΒ
its a new thing ive been working on lately and i love it in this one..
Eg
" patienceΒ a virtues campain
upon a wonder gilt grain"
alsi sensing a dbl entendre there am i right?
I guess to me it seams
phoneostetitc perfection
reminds me of shakspare ..or ..
edgar allan poe
I'm in love with Shakespearian sonnets...though I don't always use all the Olde English I do pick and choose.Β
Well if you are at all familar with my style you prob know i abs love t abstract, free styleΒ and non contemporary .. .
but at the same time enjoy consistency and perfect structureΒ
so guess its no guess why i love your work so much lol
You have a unique way of giving others a piece of your heart. I enjoy your muse.
Hey i dont mean to steal yourspot light but .i really love to hear your HONAST opinnion on my poem " lost is it"
can you give me your thoughts on it please i can take critasizam ..acually enjoy it .lol.Β
(hents "go ahead critasize") lol
Sorry its called "lost or found " not lost is it .
I found it..
ya i see.. im delayed?
We are all a little tardy now and then?
Holy crap ?thats the third time i ever heard that phrase ..amd all three times where in the past week ..once when i was late for work and then i see it on sponge bob square pants ? and now here lol very funny "tardy" ..where do that come from do u know?
I remember the word from school when the hall monitors handed out tardy slips. I never liked being late for class
Hahaha "tardy slipps" ..oh i cant get enogh of it ..can def expect to see it in a write of mine soon im sure lol..
? looking forward to the read...