Hypoxia Lily
*Ian's Lost Soul Challenge*
A bed of satin to rest awhile,
Eulogistic words on lips beguile
Pungent sweet stench of lilies,
Paradise lost now Grim Achilles.
Bible thumps in funeral knell,
Dormant in this state I dwell.
Episodes of asphyxia overwhelm,
Disorient in purgatory realm.
...Muted tormented scene,
Nightmare nocturnal lien.
.......Knowing you're all alone,
Silent screams, your own......
Hopelessness felt in somber tears,
A lover mourns for fleeting years.
.....Death....HA......what a crock of lies,
Condemned to bear.... kin and kith cries.
All senses sharp, Rigor Mortis, hyper-feelings,
Pondering chapel ornate ceilings.
Then... a jolt as lid slams down,
Embedded 6 feet below ground.
A spirit still haunts a rotting hull,
Beetles burrow into a skull.
Bearing, everlasting burn,
As worms dine and churn.
Formaldehyde oozing from pores. The worst,
... Awareness dawning, you are cursed
Hypoxia lilies suffocate a sullied sod,
......Iniquitous belief.... there is no God.
Guilt and remorse.......
...Par for the main course.
.........Ravenous insects hum.
Apprehension loomsβ¦.Hell has just begun.
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Comments
So sad and sombre ? masterfully crafted.
thanks Simon. I've been working on two poems for a while and the challenges have finally pushed them finished
Very dark!Β Beautifully composed x
Thank you kindly TinaΒ
Wow! Amazing poem Lisa! Pinned.
This write is exceptional from start to finish...The stanzaΒ
Really stood out to me. Although it was hard to choose only one.
Stay safeΒ - Syd xoΒ
Thank you kindly Syd the challenges have help all who are participating to hone their craft... you should join youβre such an articulate writer I know you can step up brilliantly
Thanks for the invite Lisa. I'm not a very good writer when I'm sober though and I feel like I need a break from alcohol for at least a couple of weeks. (It'll never happen lol)Β
I'll see what shit overflows from my septic tank at some point probably, although I do find it hard to write to a promt.
Take careΒ - Syd xoΒ Β
wonderful poem Lisa
Truly spectacular! You've captured death in so many ways here while producing poetic excellence!
I hope I captured a lost soul accurately ?
Absolutely. You created a fearful spiritual journey through the agonies of a lost soul!
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Wow amazing write. Some exceptional lines xxx
Thank you kindly P.?
The language isΒ extraordinary. I like all of the comparisons throughout the poem. The end is the best part. There is a sadness within the poem, could fit in the "Grave" challenge as well. Nice work.Β
Favorite lines
Thank you Katina
Stunningly saddenly sensational xxx?β€οΈ?pinned xxx
Thank you kindly Jill
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My Dear Lisa,
A powerful death defying write.Β But what is left behind after one's passing, for the predators of their remains to feast on, does not contain the Soul, which immediately was reincarnated.
All my love,
Larry xxx
Thank you kindly Larry....this verse more of a nightmare of sorts from a night of drinking one too many bottles of wine.
My Dear Lisa,
Sounds like you truly experienced "The Grapes Of Wrath".
All my love,
Larry xxx
Yes indubitablyΒ