Poem -
I CAN
I CAN’T
I can fight for you.
I can spend everyday battling this war,
I can scream the words written on my heart into the abyss of our relationship,
I can beg you to stay until my lungs deflate,
I can try and convince you to change your mind,
I can sit an cry whilst you watch my heart fall to pieces,
I can put those pieces in your hands and beg you to put them back together,
But I can’t make you feel the pain I feel,
I can’t make you see the bleak future I see,Â
I can’t make you speak the words you know I long to hear
And I can’t make you stay knowing you want to go.
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Comments
????. Brilliant! I love this! It is sooo true. I love the way you express the pain and anguish. I love the way you hint that you wish he could and would feel the pain as you do...and then the way you reason it all out. This is something a lot of us has felt. Well written x
Thank you so much, I try to make my pieces as relatable and yet personal as possible and this lovely comment really made my day ♥️
Aww ...you are welcome. I like to comment on poems that strike a chord with me or poems I like for no other reason than I just like them x
Good job.Â
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In the poem I could feel the author finding some sense of acceptance that maybe the relationship is over, but feeling like there is still love there to hold on to. I don't think we ever truly stop loving the people we fall in love with, unless they are physically/mentally abusive but there may still be love which is why people stay in dark relationships.Â
I could sense a great deal of strength in your character and in your creative writing. I still think, you can elaborate more. Dig even deeper you'd be surprised how much is in there to unveil to us as readers. You know how to put emotion into your writing. Â
I'm on to your third poem DEAR MOM,  I bet it's a good one!Â