Poem -
i need a smoke
Wanting....Craving...
Body's caving
Needing the poison
that feeds the addiction...
Inflicting the Chaos
That caused the affliction..
Twisted affinity
My pause ,
Your benediction
Wanting....Craving...
my body's caving.
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Sir!........I could see you out back in the alley..........leaning against a light pole.........in lighted darkness.........this is succinctly profound in it's immediacy.........gorgeous painting brother........and.......Welcome to COSMO friend..........later...........T xx
THanks!! this is the first i've ever let other eyes see my work!
Hello, Jullen b-bury; u don't look like a 'sir' lol..... liking your style, free flowing and most of all interesting to read, I really enjoyed reading that honest and real sounding poem, makes me want to see your other writes...very cool Â
hahaaa...in all fairness i did not have a picture up before :) thanks for the kind words! It can be intimidating putting your stuff out there at first.! This seems to be a great little community!!
Cheers!!
Smoke em if you got em, good write Jullen b loved how you repeated the first two lines as the last two lines it really closed out the poem nicely.
Short and amazing write, my applause
Regards
WILLIAMSJI MAVELI
why thank you Devon & WILLIAMSJI..!!! it's great to get complements on my musings from great writers themselves.!
And it's great to get such a nice compliment in return thank you.