Poem -
If My Love Is Lost To Me
Blow you winter wind
I care not what you do
For my love is far from me
Thunder is around me
Lightning strikes far trees
I can only sit and wonder
When my love will return to me
I sit as one possessed
Throwing hearth and home to waste
Not caring if it stands or burns
If my love is lost to me
I can watch as the sun rises
But its light brings no warmth
I can see the storm clouds forming
But I do not care to flee
I am lost in my dark reverie
If my love is lost to me
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Comments
Great poem!
Favorite part:
But I do not care to flee
I am lost in my dark reverie
If my love is lost to me
Semi-colon revision:
;Thunder is around me
(;) I wasn't sure if you needed the semi-colon. It may read better with it ommitted since no other area of the poem has punctuation.
The last line gave me goosebumps.
Good work here!
Thank you for sharing your poem.
oops that was a typo,.. as I said,.. my eyesight is poor when no glasses but I can fix it,,
I really like the way you care enough to give corrective comments that is the way to be a peer... awesome
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