Poem -
I'll Take the Fall
I've noticed changes in the trees,
as sunshine beats upon my back.
God whispers to me through the breeze
to help me deal with all I lack.
Β
I walk these country roads alone,
although it wasnβt always so.
I know one day Heβll call me home.
And when He does, Iβll gladly go.
Β
Soft birdsong serves to soothe my soul.
The rustling leaves assuage my pain.
You were the one that made me whole,
Iβll never feel complete again.
Β
As long as I stay brave and true
against the coming winterβs squall;
when autumn's near, Iβll think of youβ
andΒ be the one who takes the fallβ¦
**Photograph taken by the author.
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Lovely imagery Dean-Β
felt as though I was walking along side you. Thanks for sharing!Β
~Tammy
Thanks very much for reading and commenting, Tammy.
I deeply appreciate it and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Warmest wishes,
~Dean
You are a remarkable poet par excellence.
Thanks for sharing this.
Thank you very much for reading, Leah.
I deeply appreciate your comments.
Warmest wishes to you & yours,
~Dean Kuch
A poem tinged with life's sadness, grasping to the fluttering imagery of nature. I feel a close connection to the theme of 'yin and yang' in this piece. Well done.
Thanks so much for reading and "LIKING".
It is appreciated.
~Dean
Dear Dean,
I believe this is the first time that we have commented on each others poems.Β Β
You will see, that all of mine are either in poetic verse, or Haiku.
Now alone, I walk the paths
That together we once traversed
We held and kissed beneath the Oaks
In love, us both immersed
.
But you have gone, the pain is e'er
Never to be whole again
You'll be in my mind when "I Take The Fall"
And next to you I'm lain
Peace and Love,
Larry xxxΒ
Thanks for the poetic comment, Larry. I too prefer writing rhymed and structured poetry although I enjoy reading all types.
I am published in a Haiku Anthology which is available on Amazon.com:
https://www.amazon.com/Haiku-Anthology-Robyn-Corum/dp/0692849882/ref=sr_1_3?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1520514074&sr=1-3&keywords=Haiku+Anthology
and am currently an active member of the Haiku Society of America, or HSA.
Thanks very much for weighing in on this.
Your comments and support are greatly appreciated.
~Dean
wow wow wow!!! Dean great poem a masterpiece well done
Thanks so much for reading, Greg.
I really pleased that you enjoyed the poem.
Warmest wishes, my friend.
~Dean
"I've noticed changes in the trees,
as sunshine beats upon my back.
God whispers to me through the breeze
to help me deal with all I lack,"
is my favourite part of this piece and the last stanza is definitely a lovely metaphor. Well done!Β
Tehmina xo
Thanks so much for reading and for the kind comments as well, Tehmina. I'm very glad you enjoyed the poem.
With gratitude,
~Dean
A work never abating in its motives to create tension and passionate undertones.
Your ability to deal with the more unworldly elements of creative thought makes one ponder the dynamics of writing and its inspirations.
Your spirit is certainly engaged in transmitting a theme or philosophy quite distinct from others.
Take care !
:) Sorry, put my comment on the wrong poem !