I'm Holding My breath..
Much of my day is so mundane,
boring, uninspiring,
mind numbing even…
But there you are again…
Walking past my window..
A slow purposeful stride, long legs
cutting through the air.
A quick glance at your watch
and you pick up pace.
I’m holding my breath,
for fear of disturbing the air around me,
tainting the perfect image I have of you.
You walk a little faster, then start to run.
Your shoulders,so broad,swing in sync
with your arms.
You glance quickly over your shoulder.
Your face, now etched into my vision.
So classically sculpted ,
a greek God..almost
I’m holding my breath,
unable to gasp at your exquisiteness.
Lungs burning , cheeks flaming,
head so light it could leave my body.
Your arm outstretched,
Hailing the bus.
Running, you jump on board ,
coat trailing behind you.
The bus doesn’t stop, and in an instant
you and the bus are gone.....
Until tomorrow..
And I exhale….
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Thanks so much Stevie xx
I love the fresh overview on this poem..I'm at the window with you!! well written, as always..hope the reading with Prince William comes about..I'm holding my breath on that one hun !
Ana, what a breathtaking ink. I just love your pen!
Aw thanks hun! you always say the nicest things! Bless you !xx
Love this! ??? awesome pic too ?
Thanks so so much Wayne!..I have to smile sometimes as finding the pic that I think suits the theme often takes far longer than actually writing them lol :)
Haha almost certainly right lodigiana, sometimes I just can't get the right fit ???
Hmmmmmmm...interesting perspective, lodigiana.
I'm not a big fan of contemporary free verse. I prefer to read and write rhymed, structured poetry instead.
However, I DID enjoy this impressive, expressive piece.
~Dean Kuch
Hi Dean, thanks so much for your comments and to be honest I do lean towards rhyming myself- as a matter of fact it's very odd that this subject should come up today ...I also write on another poetry site (Poemhunters) and yesterday I put on a poem entitled 'A Fatal Friendship' ( which is also on this site) I would call this rhyming, structured. Anyway This morning I found a fellow 'poet'' by the name of 'The Truth' comment which read 'NOT POETRY....SHIT' and I know that he/she is terribly anti Rhyming and doesnt believe it relates to poetry at all and on checking with other poets on that site , they have been left with equally abrasive comments. This is one of the reasons I like Cosmo so much , the poets on here whilst having a preference for certain styles of writing, such as us..are prepared however to read and appreciate other structures- I did leave a comment for this poet however which you might appreciate, as follows....
The Truth
They say The Truth will set you free-
but not when rhyming poetry.
So sad my words made you annoyed,
I think you’re clearly paranoid.
So rest at ease, let me be blunt
You are no poet, just an inept wordsmith…..
( you see- I don’t always use rhymes! Now lighten up and try to enjoy and write ALL forms of poetry)
It made me smile! :) Thanks again for your great comments which truly were appreciated today xx
I completely agree, lodigiana. The members here at Cosmo have been super nice and very receptive to all poetic forms.
I was only yanking your chain a little. I too like to read all forms of poetry but I prefer writing rhymed poetry. I guess that would have been a more accurate statement.
Keep up the great writing!
~Dean <3
??? ??? classy ????
haha Wayne that's a word not often attributed to me !!... but I love it! Thank you so much xx
Lodigiana
I would be with Dean in my preference, however this was a quality write!???
Hi Keith thank you so very much for reading and commenting- you might want to take a look at my reply to Dean and you will see why your words were so helpful today!! So pleased that there are still a few rhymers left as it also happens to be my preferred style also but I love trying differing forms as well :)
Wow such poetic admiration of a guy u see everyday, perhaps tell him so. Enjoyed your descriptions. You surely were inspired swell. Kudos.
Thank you so much for you kind comments..I really appreciate you taking the time to read my work.
Lodigiana x