In a Blink
Thereās a message in a bottle floating somewhere.
Thereāre my drawings of dragons, I wrapped up in there.
Oh, my God.
Oh, my Stars.
Iām catching white rabbits, using my snares.
My devious glances catch devilish hares.
Preferring no plurals ā They always come in pairs.
Oh, my God.
Oh, my Stars.
Canāt my bad vibes go elsewhere?
But they smell it on me anyway.
Iām told to be patient; Iām told to be fair.
Iām told to āRELAXā; As they ruffle my hair.
Oh, my God.
Oh, my Stars.
āWhatever works for me to get away from youā.
You said.
So, I saidā¦
Oh, my God!
Oh, my Stars!
Maybe I better find a bridge somewhere.
Oh, my God!
Oh, my Stars!
I wish someone could take the time
To care.
For like everyone else.
Iām just a shooting star.
Ā
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Hello Max...
We survived all the sudden stops?
The first one is always a doozy...
No side effects?
I don't know about that...
Great write!
Thank you for sharing...
sparrowsong
Hey SS. I agree it's the first one that hurts the most. Doesn't keep the second onwards from hurting though. Thank you for your kind comment. They really mean a lot to me~
Hi Max! Love this! Imaginative and exciting to read! Great piece. Glad to see you are still posting poetry. Miss you!! Hope all is well! Px
Heya P! It's been ages since I've heard from you! How's the Facebook poetry going? Still posting? I'll have to catch up when I get 5 mins. Haha glad you still enjoy some of mine! Though I'm going on a trip soon so this might be my last in the while: Will need to write a farewell to explain at some point...Ā
Either way, been missing you too! If you've got new stuff ready to read, your account is where I'll be heading first!~ Hope you've been well also,Ā
Sincerely,Ā
Your friend,
Max
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Hey max!! Still on fb groups but not as active as I have been busy doing my second book...which coming out this summer! :)Ā
it is a joint project with my brother and it's taken us a long time to get to this point as we werent working on it constantly...that's what happens with family and work life. Will let u know when it's out...it has poetry are art.
I wana know about your trip coming up!!
Sounds exciting.
Well chat to u whenever and I'll post a new poem tomorrow!
thanks Pxxxx
That book sounds fantastic! Let me know when it's out and send a link! I have been offline for a bit recently, which means I've found a temporarily better state of mind š. The trip is fantastic and may Dm you with more details. Talk soon P! Will check out your new work at some point soon!
Max good to know you're still on here and you are certainly hitting the poetry ground running.
For what is offered up and so deftly written reflects many thoughts in today's society, that inner voice calling and I read into also -is this all I am, is this all I'll ever be.
Will things ever change?
Lap of the God's, fate, kismet, providence may decide that and a determination of one's will and resolve, to move on is the main player on that front.
I am rambling Max.
Probably am, but hey good to see you writing and writing well my friend :)
Full honours well deserved and earnt.
Your supportive friend, Shaun
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You never ramble Shaun! Thank you for your kind words. I agree, this poem is about futility and my belief that society will never help me change. Sorry for being self indulgent. I'm lucky to have supportive friends on here. Thank you again for the read! Be catching up shortly.Ā
Sincerely,
Max
Max you are far from being indulgent you are your own man my friend.
No one on this blue planet is goody two shoes perfect, or lives at the end of the yellow brick road in harmony.
Don't worry about catching up (I clearly never do :) there's too many to read and never enough time for life and attached myriads win many times.
Things change and move on Max, albeit slowly, but always in the right direction for one and all.
See you the flipside and will be catching up on yours I've missed tomorrow, for once I have the time.
But in the meantime respect to you my friend and what you generously offer to this site and share with its members.
Respectfully,
ShaunĀ
Thank you Shaun. It means a lot that your still here for me on Cosmo. Hope you're well mate~
Hi Max,
"message in a bottle" is only meant to be read by chance, and that's what we come here for :)
The metaphors:Ā dragons and white rabbits are intriguing for me, like job or career related.
Best wishes,
Yiyan
Thanks for the comment YY, sorry it too me so to respond. Glad you found an interest in this one mate~