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Journey Through The Past

Journey Through The Past

Here comes the ghost of the past tapping on my head
Portraying a picture of my memories, as I lay here in my bed
Climbing to the top of that old Strickeen
Dingle Bay beneath, laid bare, exhibiting a tranquil sceneΒ 

The wild Atlantic Coast bestows fisherman's tales
Of a bottlenose dolphin steering close to the sails
Playful, and surveying the good folk above
Pointed out a close coupleΒ captivated in love

Rugged scenery, sandy beaches, stretch out to Dunquin
That spiritless man, not even he can hide a grin
The Blaskets pose as a monument on the ocean
Gazing from the mainland, your eyes fail to conceal your emotion

Witnessing the summer on Dingles colourful streets
Tourists licking ice-cream, exploring the harbor from their seats
At night, O'Flaherty's plays the bodhran and the fiddle
Be sure to visit for a good pint and a giggle!

So, with gusto, I shall circle back somedayΒ 
That wind will usher me back towards Atlantics doorway
To see the selfless people that were great to me
Guiding a lost ship stranded at sea.

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Dean Kuch

There are a few examples of forced scansion throughout your poem, Keith. For example, in the following line:
"Pinpointed a man and woman captivated in love." It's the word "Pinpointed" throwing off your otherwise good rhythm in this particular stanza. Consider the following:
Pointed out a close couple captivated in love.
Merely a suggestion.
As for the remainder of your poem; stellar!
Keep up the great writing.
~Dean

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Keith Fitzsimons

Thank you and appreciate the advice! But not sure I could steal your line sir.

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Nigel Cresswell...

Your deep affection for subject really shines through the whole poem. Fabulous work.
I am not a very technical poet but, just to muddy waters, I like pinpointed.

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Keith Fitzsimons

Thanks for that and I did consider it and like you said my gut says pinpointing..

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sparrowsong

Hello Keith...

The description and detail in this is awesome...

​​​​​I felt as if I was there...

Great write!

Thank you for sharing...

Hugs...

sparrowsong

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Wayne Stubbs

??? fantastic write Keith!Β 
"Here comes the ghost of the past tapping on my head"
brilliant start to great imagery in this piece!Β 
well done Keith! ???Β 

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Larry Ran

Hi Keith,

I came back to you my people
From being lost at sea
Now, I will stay forever
And so happy will I be

Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
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