Poem -
Lost
In the silence of my abode
The tv sounds
Make white noise
Breaking my every thought
As I lay on my back
Staring up at the wall
Feeling empty
Feeling lost
It's time to remove myself
From this past
Every part of me
Wants to give in
And succumb
To the empty feeling that I'm in
Losing that special person in me
I'm finding it hard to climb up
and break free
Its liked I've pushed
The OFF button inside
With no where to release
These emotions running high
I signed a CONTRACT to myself
To avoid this phase
And to get out
Now I'm stuck again
Losing my mind
And this void is on REWIND
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Comments
Brilliant write, I absolutely love the structure of this poem. Gives the reader a sense of toppling over, falling deeper. Feeling lost is a sensation many of us can relate to in this piece, which you penned so beautiful. It is like a conversation to yourself. Which sometimes we need to do, in order to find some clarity
Keep writing, you are talented x Hugs x
Gwen :) x
Hi Gwendoline. Thank you for those lovely comments and wonderful pin. To get that view from my layout of toppling over....I didn't even think about that but love what you thought. This one just came to me and wrote some months ago actually. Thanks so much, it really helps know what you think. I will keep writing! Pxxx
Hi Pratibha, I can well relate to this poem of yours. I think probably a lot of us can. You convey the feelings of personal gloom well. Hope this is purely creative but if not hang on in there and better days will come ⚘x
Hi Tina. It is purely creative. Don't know how this came to write now but did it some months ago. I don't write dark thoughts now but I did this and I know I still can. Thanks so much for liking it and love it when I see you on my post. Pxxx
Wow sheer brilliance throughout & I love latout too 💕❤️💕
Wow thank you Jill my wonderous verse friend. It means a lot and for the lovely pin. Always love your graceful comments. Pxxx
Awww I love reading your verses to my lovely lass 💕❤️💕
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trying to stay out of that loop,great writing conveyed so well! ....................Jim
Thank you Jim....always best too.....thanks for reading! Px
Oooh this was a special write, I love the empasis on self awareness, knowing and understanding the state of mind your in and not succumbing to the emotions, be aware of them.
I particularly liked the links back to tv with the last line Rewind and this stanza
Very relatable. Love the creativity here ☀❤☀
Hi Shelly. How lovely to read your wonderful comments and amazing pin! Thank you! So interesting to read your thoughts...I didn't even think about it until u pointed it out...tv and rewind....guess it could be read over and over again like a loop that you cant escape....really fascinating how people see the verses. So appreciative of your value feedback. Pxxx
God Pratibha....just adore this. Won't go into detail...everybody already has just to say EVERY word resonated...a great big hug...so talented ♥️
Hi Marion. Love seeing your comments on my post. Thank you for that incredible pin and comments. It's not my usual writes but I know now I can still write somber and dark still. In fact it was quite easy which I was surprised myself. I understand why this one might have resonated with you. Thank you so kindly for reading. Big hugs xxx
Yes!! Oh P, I love the analogy of white noise, I have used it before in my writes, sense of loneliness and eerie unrest it brings. How you have built this feeling throughout your poem is fabulous. Also love the bold and broken verse, its similar to Mairons Epic writing style yet so unique in structure. Loved every line... captivating stuff.
Wow Max....I feel so privilaged to be compared to Marion's writing style....cos she is so talented in her writing I just love to read her work. Thank you Max its so kind of you. Thank you for liking my lost piece....I actually wrote it in May 2020!!...the bold text floating around has become my style....I first did it on my poem Soulful Hell. Its so lovely to read your comments. Have a great day! Px
Pratibha, truly a beautiful poem, I think one of your best pieces of work. I love how words resonate and have a meaning. I love the link to wellbeing and emphasis of finding yourself time and time again. A well thought out poem. You deserve success!!!!
Wow thank you Sarf...really appreciate your lovely feedback and pin! Can you believe it I wrote this last May 2020!!? I think I was writing it from a reflective point of view. I really like this one. I feel the whole year through lockdown I have really got back into writing. Pxxx
Just wanted to take the time to say, please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please write more. XD
aaaawwww thank you Max....will do.....I mean I am.....still having fun with words and lines! Still learning loads from here and names of different poem styles!!! I wana publish a little mindfulness book next.
Thank you for the lovely encouragement on my birthday!! Pxxx
Happy Birthday P!! Wishing all the best on publishing your book!! Somthing I could only dream of XD
Thanks Max. You will publish when you are ready. I can support you. You tell me. Once you done with studying 🤪 PX
Sad and melancholy beautifully well written and for all the right poetic reasons.
It reads as if one is balanced on a knife edge over a high cliff and dare not lose balance for the fall will spell doom and disaster, a great analogy of a theme expressed and darkly displayed.
And I guess people love reading the dark ones for they make them feel truly alive.
A great and at all times most breath-taking write Pratibha and full deserving poetry honours bestowed my friend.
HI P,
Very good,
love,
Terry.
xoxo ;)