Lost Man`s Conclusion
Earth revolves - the blank edged paper.
With crusty edges and a fluid centre.
Fell from afar, crashed and burned and charred
Limping sideways,
Like a seaward crustation.
Decisions are driven by a tasty temptation
The haves and the have nots
And impatient waiting
Around. Merry-“Go round”
For someone else to solve our problems.
Useless
Whilst my sharks are
Concocting solvents into new solutions
Woven half-truths and hasty conclusions.
Is it me or - is it you?
Perspective, positioning and a subtle point of view.
Or is it the trees or the birds?
It can`t be an issue
If I can`t be observed
The invisible man
Played the devil’s hand
Tossing weighted dice
He`s a lost man
Lost man
The humble man
The lucky demand
Had a hidden intent
Lost man
Lost man
Forgetful figures.
Forgiven Sins.
War-Fair stricken
And tossed in the bin.
Fluid oceans and static sands.
A crowd of zero – Surrounds this man
Not able to comprehend – or understand
A crowd of zero – Surrounds this man
Concluding the values.
Diluted by greed, by pleasure and needs.
And voices – The pleas
The world sighs yet again.
Like it has done so countlessly before
For the haves - the have nots.
And for the Fish
In the Sea.
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There is such a melancholic feel with this one, Max, and as I read there is the image of a sad clown grinding a long piece of paper out of a weird machine. Funny what piens can do is t it? Your writing just gets better and better...and it started of as great! Love this poem x
Thanks so much Tina! I'm really chuffed that you liked this one. To be honest it's been in the works for a lot longer than usual for me, I thought it might come off as a bit stale... honestly still trying to find my poetry voice once again. But thank you for your kind words, with you feedback I'll keep striving to be the best i can be. Sincerely, yo your friend Max~
100% NOT stale ... Promise you! Its fabulous x
I`m glad you say so, Tina. Thanks so much~
A crowd of zero, awful and yet too often too true. But luckily there is an alternative dimension to be found at🤔cosmo56? 321.Noone is always without contact. Also like the sideways movement. And yes, I am back from France
Hi John, thanks so much for your comment on this one and very true, sometimes we just have to be comfortable with living in our own dimension. Thank you for your kind and generous comment my friend~
At your service, fir we poets serve the Words. There will he some stuff of mine forthcoming (holiday work and thinking😜😕 Keep safe and writing
Hello Max,
there are just so many facets to this little gem (no pun intended) that I find myself struggling to identify just which precisely, are my favourites ..
On the one hand, I find the concept behind it particularly intriguing .. but that becomes clearer with back on back visits .. and without doubt, it has more subtle nuances than the fine chianti I had with last evenings dinner ..
The flow appears flawless (again no intentional pun) and irrespective of whether I skip through the whole thing at some pace or read it aloud to myself and savour it, your "Lost Man's Conclusion" has unexpected, hidden and likewise, fascinating depths .. I am sure that this is one of those I shall revisit again from time to time .. Oh' I particularly like "Limping sideways, Like a seaward crustation"... but maybe that's because I come from a long line of crabs, on my mothers side ................
All in all, a most pleasant and thoroughly enjoyable reading experience my friend .. and I look forward to exploring your work further very soon .. All Good Things, Neville :)
Hi Neville, thank you so much for your kind and generous comment on my post! To be honest, I feel honoured that you stopped by on this one. But yes, flow and provoking emotion are some of my key and favourite techniques of poetry. I love working with creative phrases and engaging in old sayings. I look forward to reading more of your work, I saw that you posted a few more today. Really, as a young and developing poet, your words motivate me to write more~ Again, thanks so much~ Sincerely, Max
Sounds like a win win to me .. Sentiment well n truly reciprocated mate :)
Decisions are driven by a tasty temptation
The haves and the have nots
And impatient waiting
Around. Merry-“Go round”
For someone else to solve our problems.
this is the best verse for me …kudos friend such a meaningful poem .
Why thank you Kishore. To be honest, it's my favorite Stanza too. I know I have been off my poetry game at the moment, but really just so you know, its comments like yours that motivate me to continue writing. Thank you ever so much. Sincerely, Max
Hey ...sorry to have missed this one Max...I think it has all been said already my friend...I really did enjoy reading this one...Max...just write OK. You don't need to write to any kind of form or to please anyone or for any other reason that the words need to come out. Xx
Hi Marion, Thanks so much for your kind comment. I feel as if I`m really not into writing or re-writing old thoughts and phrases. Because it makes me sense that I'm not progressing or fulfilling or improving. I know I`m my biggest critique. Sometimes it gets the best of me. Thank you so much, really, you motivate me to just write who I am and what I stand for. Your words mean a hell of a lot.
Max a most forlorn write and like viewing through a glass darkly.
It's as if one is saying even shining gold casts a shadow and all hope is forgotten, abandoned and destitute.
I'll be honest it's a hard one to take in and digest but superb writing in that other worldly or perhaps reality place of today's festooned ill's and heartache's.
Things and times change though, be it for the good, be it for it the not so good.
There's no equality in life for there will always be inequality and its unwanted imperfections.
In people and their questionable 'morals' towards others.
Like I said a hard one to read and warts and all Max.
And it's good not to get sugar coated but to se things through the eyes of others and see things how they really are.
A reality check.
Thanks Max for sharing and one that raises more questions than easy answers in today's society and where we're headed.
Hang in there my friend.
Shaun.